Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line chart highlights the number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island between the year 2010–2017.
Overall, it is clear that the number of visitors staying on cruise ships were higher than visitors staying on island in year 2017, by contrast in 2010 this trend was opposite, number of visitors staying on island was higher.
To begin with, in 2010, the number of visitors who staying on cruise ship was vary between 0–0.5, while same as the number of tourists who stay on island was vary between 0.5–1. The amount of total is 1 in year 2010. In 2011, it seem that the number of visitors who staying on cruise ships became slightly till 2012, just same as beginning, whereas the number of staying on island were rose till 2013 after approx 1.5 then
Those were some till 2015. Then after it became more between 1–1.5, after that it was more increase in 2017 again 1.5. Moving further, after 2012 the number of tourists were became slightly grew till the year 2017. Finally, it reach at 2. Moreover, the amount of arrivals was rose slightly till 2015, then it was same in both 2015 and 2016, between 2.5 to 3. After that, it was rose sharply to year 2017 and became 3.5.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the main features of the graph, but the data interpretation is frequently inaccurate and confusing. While you identify the shift between cruise ship and island visitors, the specific figures provided (e.g., '0–0.5', '1.5', '2.5 to 3') do not clearly align with the visual data provided in the prompt. The description of trends is often vague, using phrases like 'those were some' or 'it became more', which fails to clearly communicate the data to the reader. To improve, focus on selecting key data points—such as the starting and ending values or significant turning points—and describing them with precision rather than attempting to narrate every minor fluctuation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by unclear referencing and disjointed sentences. Phrases like 'Those were some till 2015' and 'Moving further, after 2012 the number of tourists were became slightly grew' lack clear connections to the previous information. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes misused, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the data. To improve, ensure that each sentence clearly links to the previous one and that you use transition words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'subsequently') to guide the reader through the data points logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic verbs like 'staying', 'became', and 'rose'. There are several instances of awkward word choice and incorrect collocations, such as 'the number of visitors who staying' (should be 'who stayed') and 'the amount of total is 1'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends with precision. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a wider variety of verbs and nouns related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'a significant increase'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('the number of visitors... were higher'), incorrect verb tenses ('the amount of arrivals was rose'), and awkward sentence structures ('the number of tourists were became slightly grew'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors in basic grammar are persistent throughout the text. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive and active voice when describing data. Proofreading for basic tense consistency would also significantly enhance the quality of your writing.
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