Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting a caribean island between 2010 to 2017.
Visitors are divided in two portions visitors who staying on cruise ship and the visitor staying on island and total .The line grap cruise ship visitor is factruated from 2010 to 2013 in 0.5 millions .The graph is gradually moving to its peak point at with number of 2million visitor in 2017.
However the island visitor from 2010 to 2011 are straght decline But from 2012 to 2015the graph of staying visitor in island eventually reduce but from 2016 to 2017the line graph rises.
The total sum of visitor who visited the island grow simultaneously from 2010 to 2015 with the total number of 2.7 million then from 2016 to 2017 their is stright grow in the number 3.5 million of visitor in the caribean island.
Overall the graph indecate both visitor staying on cruise ans staying on island are equal in numbers.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the trends for cruise ship and island visitors. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks precision. For example, the description of the cruise ship data as 'factruated' is unclear, and the claim that the two categories are 'equal in numbers' is not supported by the data provided. The overview is weak and does not effectively highlight the most significant trends or differences. To improve, you should focus on identifying the key peaks and troughs more accurately and providing a clearer summary of the overall relationship between the two categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is hindered by poor sentence structure and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are often abrupt or missing, such as the sudden shift from cruise ship data to island visitors. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison. While there is an attempt to group information, the lack of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') makes the text feel disjointed. Improving the use of cohesive devices would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'caribean', 'factruated', 'straght', and 'indecate', which occasionally impede readability. The use of 'portion' and 'sum' is not always contextually appropriate for describing data trends. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider variety of verbs and nouns to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'declined', 'surged', or 'remained stable'. Focusing on accurate spelling and more precise terminology for data reporting will help improve your score in this area.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'visitor... are staying'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'their is stright grow'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limits the complexity of the writing. You should focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles to improve your accuracy.
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