Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

After analyzing the graph, it can be seen clearly that the number of tourists visiting Caribbean island staying on cruise ships in 2010 to 2017 started from 0 point and increase on 2011 in 2012 decrease after that staying point increasingly end of the year 2017. secondly Visitors staying on island from 2010 start nearly 1 the first two years same after that visitors increasingly to 2015. And second last and last two years Visitors decreased. thirdly the total Visitors staying on cruise ships and staying on island started from 1 and increasingly 3.5 respectively between 2010 and 2017. from 2015 to 2016 number of Visitors stop on near 3 point.

overall, The lowest point in 2010 Visitors staying on cruise ships it start near 0.5. And highest point in 2017 number of total Visitors it built on 3.5.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The description of trends is confusing and often contradictory, such as stating the cruise ship data 'started from 0 point' and then mentioning '0.5' later. Key features are not clearly identified, and the comparison between the two categories (cruise ship visitors vs. island stayers) is poorly executed. The data points mentioned are often inaccurate or difficult to follow, making it hard for the reader to understand the actual trends shown in the graph. To improve, focus on identifying the starting, ending, and peak values clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical progression. While there are paragraph breaks, the internal structure of the paragraphs is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'secondly', 'second last', and 'thirdly', which do not effectively link the ideas. The referencing is unclear, and the flow of information is interrupted by fragmented sentences and poor sentence structure. The overall arrangement of information is confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the development of the trends described.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'increase', 'decrease', 'number', and 'visitors', often using them incorrectly or in awkward collocations (e.g., 'staying point increasingly end of the year'). There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary suitable for describing data, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'dramatically'. The lack of precision in word choice significantly hinders the clarity of the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. Sentence structures are often incomplete or run-on, such as 'in 2010 to 2017 started from 0 point and increase on 2011'. There is a lack of control over basic verb tenses, prepositions, and articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with random capitalization and missing commas. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. Significant improvement in basic sentence construction and grammatical accuracy is required.

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