Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph compares the number of Caribbean island tourists staying on the island and the cruise ships from 2010 to 2017 in millions.

In terms of the graph, the number of the tourists witnessed a consistent upward trajectories for both of the place as well as the total. The number of cruise ship tourists was lowest between them at the begin which ended handling the highest amount of tourists by the end of the timeframe. in contrast number of people staying on island witnessed a decent rise by 2017.

in 2010, approximately 250,000 tourists stayed on cruise ships which demonstrated a dramatic rise to 2 million by the end of the timeframe. Conversely, on island 750,000 tourists stayed in 2010 which showed a stable trend during 2013 to 2015, finally ended with 1.5 million tourists

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified the main trends—the upward trajectory of both categories and the crossover point—the analysis is underdeveloped. You have provided some data points, but the summary lacks sufficient detail to fully satisfy the requirements of an Academic Task 1 response. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive overview of the data, including more specific comparisons between the two categories throughout the period, and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for full development of your ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow is hindered by the brevity of the response and some mechanical use of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'In terms of the graph' are somewhat generic, and the transition between the overview and the specific data points is abrupt. The use of referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'both of the place', which is grammatically awkward and disrupts the flow. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, distinct purpose.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. You use some repetitive phrasing, such as 'witnessed a... rise' and 'number of... tourists'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'consistent upward trajectories for both of the place' and 'at the begin'. These errors occasionally make the meaning slightly less clear. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase' (e.g., 'surged', 'climbed', 'experienced growth') and ensure you are using nouns and prepositions correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your writing. Examples include 'the number of the tourists', 'both of the place', and 'in contrast number of people'. Additionally, there are issues with punctuation and capitalization, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters. The sentence structure is often fragmented or awkward, which limits the range of your grammatical control. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that your sentences are complete and punctuated correctly.

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