Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the numbers of tourists visting a certain Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017 are in millions.
Overall, there are two types of visitors who are living on Caribbean island. Firstly the visitors staying on island are common and secondly the most tourists are staying on cruise ships.
Number of visitors staying on island is 0 in 2010. However, it increase to 0.5 million in 2011 but after 2011 a sharp decline and a noticable rise upto 2 millions in 2012 to 2017. The common trend is the tourists which are living on the cruise ships. In 2010 the visitors are hardly 1 million and it gradually increase to 1.5 millions in 2015 but after 2015 there is a noticeable decrease in this tre
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you identify the two categories of visitors, the analysis is incomplete. The description of the data is fragmented, and the summary ends abruptly mid-sentence, meaning the trends are not fully reported or compared. To improve, ensure you provide a complete overview of the data, including all time periods, and avoid leaving sentences unfinished. You must also ensure that all key features are described clearly to meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the transition between ideas is mechanical and disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited, and the abrupt ending makes the overall structure feel incomplete. To improve, use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your sentences more fluidly. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that the information is presented in a way that is easy for the reader to follow from start to finish.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on simple phrasing like 'common' or 'increase'. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'living on Caribbean island', which is inaccurate in the context of tourism. Spelling errors, such as 'visting' and 'noticable', further detract from the quality of the writing. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and ensure you proofread your work for spelling accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and article usage (e.g., 'the most tourists', 'it increase', 'the visitors are hardly'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and the lack of control over complex sentences limits the range. The incomplete final sentence also creates a grammatical breakdown. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage when describing past data. Practice constructing more complex sentences using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.
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