Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph illustrates the number of visitor visiting a specific Caribbean island between 2010 to 2017.

Overall, it is clear that the graph describe the visitor staying on Cruise ship then visitors staying on island and total visitors of ratio was higher.

Starting from, in 2010 starting 0.3time and increase 0.5time 2011. 2012 decrease 0.3time in2013 increase 0.5 time and 2014 to increase 2017 2 time. Second visitors staying on island in 2010 0.8 time and stable 2011 then ratio was increase 2013 1.5 time stable in 3 year 2015 then decrease in 2016 1.3 time and increase 2017 1.5 time.finally last total ratio of visitors in 2010 starting 1 time increase 2011 1.3 time.in 2011 to 2012 increase 1.5 time. In 2012 to 2017 countaully increase 3.5 time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the graph by mentioning cruise ship visitors, stay-on-island visitors, and total visitors, and attempts to report some trends and figures. However, the task achievement is heavily compromised in several ways. Firstly, the word count is only 129 words, failing to meet the minimum requirement of 150 words, which incurs a direct penalty. Secondly, the data reported (such as '0.3 time' or '3.5 time') is garbled, highly inaccurate, and fails to reflect standard data reporting conventions. The main features are not clearly selected or compared, resulting in an unclear and incomplete overview. Consequently, the response earns a Band 4.0 for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is organized into brief paragraphs, including an introduction and an overall statement. However, the logical progression breaks down entirely in the body paragraph. The student uses a few basic transitional expressions like 'Starting from', 'Second', and 'finally last', but these are insufficient and mechanically applied. Cohesive devices and referencing are frequently faulty, making it extremely difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information or understand which data points correspond to which categories. Paragraphing is rudimentary and inadequate for a clear report. Overall, coherence and cohesion reflect a Band 4.0 level.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and restricted. Phrases like 'number of visitor visiting', 'graph describe', and repetitive use of numbers followed by the word 'time' (e.g., '0.5 time', '1.5 time') show a severe lack of appropriate lexical resources for reporting statistical data. There is no evidence of less common vocabulary or accurate collocations related to trends (such as 'fluctuate', 'peak', or 'decline'). Spelling and word choice errors are pervasive and significantly strain the reader, fitting the descriptors for Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is very weak throughout the essay. The response consists almost entirely of poorly constructed, fragmented simple sentences or severely flawed attempts at complex structures, such as 'total visitors of ratio was higher' and 'in 2012 to 2017 countaully increase'. There are frequent, major errors in tense usage, word forms, prepositions, and syntax that frequently distort the meaning and make sentences ungrammatical. The range of structures is extremely limited, aligning clearly with Band 4.0 descriptors.

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