Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrated the number of tourists came on a trip a specific Caribbean island where two types of visitors were, one who stayed on cruise ships and second who stayed on island between 2010 and 2017.
Overall, in the year 2010 most of the visitors stayed on cruise ships and by the year 2013 it was increased and over the time it declined gradually. Additionally, people who stayed on island were increased rapidly over the time and by the year 2017 it was on its peak. The total number of visitors were escalated sharply over the time.
In 2010, the lowest number of visitors was accounted for tourist who stayed on cruise ships with around 0.25 millions of visitors. While around 0.75 millions of visitors was decided to stay on island. In total around 1 million visitors visited Caribbean Island: and it escalate gradually over the time. In the year 2017 it reached on its peak with around 3.5 million of visitors.
In the year 2013, visitors who wanted to stay on island reached on peak with around 1.5 millions of visitors. However, In the year 2012 tourist who stayed on cruise ships came last with the lowest number of visitors fallowed by 0.25 millions of visitors.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph, identifying the two categories of visitors (cruise ship passengers and island stayers) and mentioning overall trends and endpoints. However, the information is presented somewhat disjointedly and contains inaccuracies regarding data points. For example, the student states that in 2013 visitors staying on the island reached a peak with around 1.5 million, and also mentions that 2017 was the peak for total visitors at around 3.5 million. Furthermore, the overview is rather basic and lacks a fully developed comparative summary of the main trends. Therefore, the response fulfills the basic requirements of Task Achievement but remains at a Band 5.5 level due to under-developed highlights and slight data misinterpretations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into four paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs. However, the overall progression lacks clear logical flow. The division of body paragraphs feels slightly disorganised, with repetitive referencing such as 'over the time' appearing multiple times in close proximity. Cohesive devices are sometimes used awkwardly, as seen with 'Additionally' and 'However', and the colon usage in the third paragraph disrupts sentence flow. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical links between sentences need greater clarity and varied cohesive devices to achieve a higher band score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses a limited and repetitive vocabulary set to describe data trends, such as 'increased rapidly', 'escalated sharply', and 'reached on its peak'. There are also frequent issues with collocation and prepositional usage, including 'came on a trip a specific Caribbean island', 'stayed on island' (missing articles), and 'fallowed by' (spelling error for followed). While the language is minimally adequate to convey basic trends, the lexical range lacks flexibility and precision, and errors in word choice are noticeable throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writing contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but many attempts at complexity are marred by grammatical errors. Examples include 'The line graph illustrated' (tense inconsistency), 'the number of tourists came' (missing relative pronoun or participle), and 'tourist who stayed' (singular noun with plural context). Prepositions and articles are frequently misused or omitted, as seen in 'was decided to stay' and 'on its peak'. Frequent errors in grammar and punctuation cause some difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 5.0.
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