Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The provided line graph illustrates the total number of tourist visited carribean Insalnd from the year 2010 to 2017.
Overall, the total number of tourist visted on inland increased enoromously every year, where as the number of people who stayed on insland fluctuted in the given period of time.
In the 2010, the number of total visitors on insland was almost 1 million from which 75000 stayed on inland, and 25000 choose cruise ships for their stay. In
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempted to summarize the graph showing tourist numbers between 2010 and 2017, providing an overview and initial data points. However, the response is severely incomplete, cutting off abruptly mid-sentence with only 78 words produced against the required 150-word minimum. Because of this major shortcoming, the task is only partially addressed, and key features and comparisons required for the rest of the period are entirely missing. Consequently, the score is significantly penalized for length and lack of full task completion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text demonstrates a basic structure with an introduction and an overview sentence. However, the severe under-length of the response prevents any sustained logical organization or progression. Paragraphing is incomplete, as the response trails off into an unfinished third paragraph. Cohesive devices such as 'where as' are attempted, but referencing and flow are disrupted by the abrupt ending of the text. Overall cohesion cannot be fully demonstrated due to the extremely limited volume of writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The student attempts some task-specific vocabulary related to tourism, such as 'line graph', 'visitors', and 'cruise ships'. However, there are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'carribean', 'Insalnd', 'visted', 'enoromously', and 'fluctuted'. The range of vocabulary is limited and basic, and the frequent spelling mistakes hinder the overall lexical impression, though meaning is occasionally retrievable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The student attempts both simple and complex structures, such as the relative clause 'from which 75000 stayed on inland'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('in 2010', 'on inland'), incorrect prepositions, and misuse of verb forms ('tourist visited' instead of 'tourists visited'). Furthermore, the response is cut off mid-sentence, leaving the grammatical structure incomplete. The density of errors relative to the short text length heavily impacts this score.
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