Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The illustration gives information about number of tourists on a specific Caribbean island during the period of 2010 to 2017. Overall,it demonstrates a positive graph in total,millions of visitors rise significantly very recetly. Only the numbers of visitors staying on the island doesn't grow much.
It is quite evident from the graph that in the year 2010 the total population including visitors staying on cruise ship,visitors staying on island altogether is approx 1.8million. It almost remain same and rose gradually untill 2012,butt when 2013 start the visitors take a huge jump from 2 million to 6 million.
Furthermore, in the year 2015 the visitors on island started to decrease and won't stop untill 2016,but meanwhile the overall numbers shows a sharp upright trend and show a positive tuen.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the chart, including the overall upward trend and the breakdown between visitors staying on the island versus cruise ships. However, there are significant data inaccuracies, such as claiming the total jumped to '6 million' in 2013 (when the maximum on the graph is 3.5 million). Additionally, the response falls well below the required 150-word minimum, containing only 128 words. This results in an under-developed overview and incomplete coverage of the data. Band score: 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into three brief paragraphs, attempting an introduction, overview, and body details. However, logical progression is weak and cohesion is often faulty or mechanical, using basic linkers like 'Furthermore' and 'It is quite evident'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall structure feels disjointed due to the abrupt sentences and under-length nature of the response. Band score: 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with several spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'recetly', 'tuen', and 'butt'. While the student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like 'visitors', 'cruise ship', and 'trend', the range is limited and inadequate for a higher band. Collocations are occasionally unnatural. Band score: 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response features a very limited range of sentence structures, with frequent grammatical errors, incorrect verb tenses, and punctuation issues (e.g., missing spaces after commas, 'the numbers of visitors ... doesn't grow', 'won't stop untill 2016'). Complex structures are attempted but are generally faulty and impede clear communication at times. Band score: 4.5.
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