Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph depicts the infromation about the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribber island in the period of 7 years .

It can be seen clearly from line graph, in 2010 the total number of tourists visiting a caribbean island that was 1 million . but after that it was sharply inlined on almost 3 million visitors in 2016 and in 2017 it noted at 3.5 million .

Whereas , the visitors staing in island that accounted at below 1 million visit in 2010 . However , in 2013 that perpotion on 1.5 million.

Further more , between 2013 and 2015 it shopw stabel trend . But in 2016 it was littel bit declined and after that it again inclined on 1.5 million visitors . In contrast, in2010 only 0.5 below visitors staying on cruise shop . By contrast , from 2010 to 2013 it show flucation trend . whereas , between 2013 to 2017 it show increased on 2 million visitors .

Overall, the maximum total visitors visit caribbean island in 2010 . But the minimum visitors staying on curise ships in same year . whereas , it both incline on top in 2017 .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to cover the main features of the chart, noting the overall upward trajectory of the total tourists and mentioning categories like those staying on the island and cruise ships. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reading the data. For instance, the conclusion states that the maximum total visitors were in 2010, which directly contradicts the graph where 2010 starts at 1 million and 2017 reaches 3.5 million. Additionally, many figures are misreported or vague, such as stating '0.5 below visitors staying on cruise shop'. While an overview is attempted at the end, the task is only partially addressed due to data misinterpretations and lack of clear comparative analysis.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response uses some basic cohesive devices and transitional markers such as 'Whereas', 'However', 'Further more', and 'In contrast'. However, the paragraphing and sentence sequencing are very disjointed, and referencing is frequently unclear. Sentences are often fragmented or awkwardly linked, making the progression difficult to follow. The misuse of transition words disrupts the logical flow between ideas. Paragraphs are very short and fail to group information coherently around specific trends or categories.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors ('infromation', 'Caribber', 'caribbean', 'staing', 'perpotion', 'shopw', 'stabel', 'littel', 'flucation', 'curise') and word-form errors ('inlined', 'noted at', 'accounted at', 'increased on'). Attempts at less common vocabulary fail due to inaccurate collocations and word choice. The limited range of vocabulary and pervasive errors cause frequent strain for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex structures are heavily flawed, resulting in ungrammatical constructions such as 'that was 1 million . but after that it was sharply inlined' and 'it both incline on top in 2017'. Punctuation and tense usage are erratic. Errors occur in almost every sentence, significantly impeding communication and obscuring the intended meaning.

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