Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graoph illustrate the number of tourists visiting a perticular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
It is clear that a large number of turist visiting staying on island in 2017 and lowest visitor staying ship in 2012. caribbean ships turists visitore staying on island lowest .
in 2010 t0 2011 visitor staying on ship increasing 0.5 million and 2012 is dramaticly up down agein 2013 continusly increas it . 2014 visitor staying on islan 1 milllion visitoe and 2017 its 2 million increas .and totaale 2017 3.5 . totale rate in 2010 have 1 million and day by day increas .
Visitor staying on cruise shipe 2010 0.25 million
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, standing at only 111 words. While the student attempts to report some features from the graph, such as the total in 2017 ('totale 2017 3.5') and cruise ship numbers, the information is presented in a fragmented, incomplete manner. There is no clear overview, and several data points are either omitted or poorly articulated. The response addresses the task only minimally, warranting a band score of 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text lacks logical organization and proper progression. Ideas are presented in disjointed sentences and isolated sentence fragments, such as 'Visitor staying on cruise shipe 2010 0.25 million'. There is an absence of standard paragraphing, and cohesive devices are virtually unused or misused. Referencing is unclear, making the overall arrangement very difficult to follow. This aligns with the descriptors for Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary is very basic, repetitive, and plagued by severe spelling errors throughout the text (e.g., 'graoph' for graph, 'perticular' for particular, 'turist' for tourist, 'visitoe' for visitor, 'totale' for total). The student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'tourists' and 'cruise ships', but the extensive spelling mistakes and limited control over word forms strain the reader significantly, corresponding to a Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak. The response consists mostly of broken fragments and simple structures with frequent, heavy errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence construction (e.g., 'the line graoph illustrate', 'visitor staying on ship increasing', '2012 is dramaticly up down agein'). These errors cause frequent misinterpretation and severely distort meaning, placing the writing squarely at Band 4.0.
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