Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting a particular caribben island from 2010 and 2017.
Overall, the most striking aspect shows in this figure is that the nomber of turist visiting , visitors staying on cruise ships and totale visitors increased there was a period of time .
As it can see that the figure for cruise ships staying falctuation from around 0.5 million in 2010 to 2013 while the priod between 1st and 2nd time 2013 and 2017 time experienced a dramatice rise in this figure ,whice went up from 1 million to just above 2 million . Between 2010 and 2015 ,there was sllow fall and agin rais in they on island staying , that increased from around 0.7 million to 1.5 million .
However , The period between 2010 and 2017 time went a dramatic increasing in totale visitors , where went up from 1 million to 3.5 million .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting information from the line graph about tourists visiting a Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. However, the response falls short in several areas. The overview is extremely vague and contains grammatical breakdown, making it difficult to fully grasp the key trends at a glance. Furthermore, while the student mentions cruise ships and total visitors, the figures cited (such as cruise ships going from 1 million to 2 million between 2013 and 2017) are inaccurate compared to the actual data. The response meets the minimum length requirement, but the lack of accurate data reporting, underdeveloped details, and poor integration of the three data series keep this performance at a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, which shows an attempt at basic organisation. However, there is no clear logical progression throughout the response. Cohesive devices are either misused, overly mechanical, or awkward, such as starting sentences with 'As it can see that' or 'However, The period between'. Referencing is also confusing, with vague phrases like 'the priod between 1st and 2nd time'. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is weak and repetitive, leading to an overall disjointed flow. This aligns best with the Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very limited and basic, with numerous spelling and word-choice errors that impede communication. Examples of severe spelling mistakes include 'caribben' for Caribbean, 'nomber' for number, 'turist' for tourist, 'totale' for total, 'falctuation' for fluctuation, 'priod' for period, 'dramatice' for dramatic, 'whice' for which, 'sllow' for slow, and 'agin' for again. The range of vocabulary is insufficient for precise reporting, frequently forcing the reader to guess the intended meaning. This clearly reflects a Band 4.0 performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures and faulty attempts at complex forms. There are persistent, highly disruptive errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues, tense confusion, and malformed clauses, such as 'The line graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting a particular caribben island from 2010 and 2017' (should be 'between 2010 and 2017') and 'As it can see that' (should be 'As can be seen'). Punctuation and spacing errors (e.g., spaces before commas) are also frequent. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.
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