Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given bar chart elucidates information about Number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island ([redacted phone]) . The chart compares different categories and present the data in number or percentage .

Overall, it can that there are noticeable among the different categories shown in the chart . In addition , some categories show some fluctucation increament as well as decreament wheares for some casess they remain stable .

According to the chart , the chart first main activities visitors staying on cruise ships in 2010 0.2.5%, 2011 0.5 %, 2012 0.2 %, 2013 0.5% 2014 1 %, 2015 1.2% , 2016 1.5 %, 2017 2% in millions of visitor . The followed by secon activities Visitors staying in island 2010 0.8% , 2011 0.7 % , 2012 1.2 % , 2013 1.5 % , 2014 1.5 % , 2015 1.5 % , 2016 1.4 % , 2017 1.5 % in millions of visitors . The final and last activities Total visitors

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The student attempts to address the prompt by describing a graph (referred to mistakenly as a bar chart), but the response is severely incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence ("The final and last activities Total visitors"). The overview is extremely vague and fails to outline the main trends clearly. Furthermore, the reporting of data is highly erratic, ungrammatical, and mixes numbers with percentages incorrectly (e.g., "0.2.5%"). Because the response is abruptly truncated and lacks proper data selection and comparison, it falls short of fully satisfying the requirements of Task 1. This warrants a band score of 4.0 based on minimal and incomplete task execution.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is divided into short paragraphs, but the overall organization lacks logical progression and coherence. Transition phrases like "In addition" and "According to the chart" are used mechanically. Crucially, the response breaks off abruptly at the end, preventing any cohesive conclusion or full development of ideas. Referencing between sentences is often unclear, and the mechanical listing of data points without contextual flow disrupts the reader's ability to follow the information smoothly. This aligns with the descriptor for band 4.0, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently throughout.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and often inaccurate. The student misidentifies the visual aid as a "bar chart" instead of a line graph and uses non-standard vocabulary such as "fluctucation increament as well as decreament". Moreover, the misuse of percentage signs alongside raw numbers ("0.2.5%", "0.8%") demonstrates a lack of control over basic numerical and lexical terminology. Although some topic-related words like "tourists" and "visitors" appear, the frequent errors and restricted range strain the reader and indicate a band 4.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of fragmented or poorly constructed simple sentences. There are frequent and severe grammatical errors throughout, such as missing verbs ("it can that there are noticeable among"), incorrect prepositions, and incomplete clauses, culminating in the sentence fragment at the end. Punctuation is also problematic, with spaces incorrectly placed before commas and periods. These persistent errors frequently distort meaning and impede communication, corresponding to a band score of 4.0.

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