Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line graph illustrate how much tourist visiting a carribbean island from 2010 to 2017.and also describes the number of people stay on cruise ship, rest on island and how many individuals are final.
Overall,the most importang thing seen in line graph is the total amount of people dramatically increased wherease,the other two type of visitors equally went up.
Regarding,visitors staying on island as we see increasing from .7 million to 1.5 million from 2010 to 2017.however in 2016 fell down to 1.3 million number of visitors.Secondly Line graph describe the people staying on cruise ships surged from .3 million to 2 million through 2010 to 2017.
finally, as we see the last number of visitors is total number of people
start from 1 million and dramatically increasing to 3.5 million from 2010 to 2017. while when it meet at 2016 it was fell down to 2.7 miilion number of visitirs
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the graph, including the overall upward trend of the total visitors as well as the separate figures for cruise ship passengers and visitors staying on the island. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the total visitors in 2016 did not fall down from 2.75 to 2.75, but rather plateaued, and the island visitor figures contain several confusions. The overview provided in the second paragraph is somewhat vague and poorly articulated. Because the response covers all three data series but suffers from misinterpretations of specific data points and weak development, it falls into Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is structured into an introduction and body paragraphs, but the organization is severely hindered by poor sentence construction and inadequate use of cohesive devices. Transitional phrases like 'Regarding' and 'finally' are used awkwardly, and sentences run into one another without proper punctuation or logical links (e.g., 'and also describes the number of people stay on cruise ship, rest on island and how many individuals are final'). Paragraphing is poorly controlled, and referencing throughout the text is often confusing, making the progression of ideas difficult to follow. These issues align with a Band 4 level of coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. The student relies heavily on simple verbs and nouns such as 'increase', 'go up', and 'people', frequently misusing words and collocations (e.g., 'how much tourist visiting', 'rest on island', 'individuals are final'). There are also spelling and capitalization errors such as 'carribbean' and 'importang'. While the basic meaning of a trend is occasionally communicated, the vocabulary is insufficient to discuss data with precision, placing this response firmly in Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the text. The response contains numerous serious errors, including missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect verb tenses, and fragmented structures (e.g., 'The line graph illustrate', 'people stay on cruise ship', 'wherease, the other two type of visitors equally went up'). Simple sentences are prone to errors, and attempts at more complex structures almost invariably result in ungrammatical formulations. Punctuation is also erratic, with misplaced commas and periods. These widespread errors frequently impede communication, corresponding to a Band 4 score.
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