Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph illustrates the amount of travelers exploring specific place Caribbean Island, where all of the visitors staying at two points, cruise ships and island during 2010 and 2017.

Overall, these lines displaying were two categories of staying at two popular place for instance, Cruise Ships and an Island. they were increasing at different years such as, 2012, 2011, and also 2014 after that, these lines were decreasing at the same years in Caribbean Island like that, 2016, 2014 and 2013.

In 2010, the amount of strangers staying at two varied places, first staying at curies ship, the line was started in 2010 at very weak point but after that, it was reaching bit in various years, 2013, 2015.

the second staying at Island, after tourists looking a particular point at Caribbean Island among the 2010 year and 2017, the second line was begging bit tiny point 0.5 as after that it was boosting in similar years 2015, 2016, and 2017.

The total line was commencing above point rather than two lines, that was on 1 in 2010 and the line was going to increased in same years 2013, 2014, and 2016.

In addition, the line reached at extremely highest point 3.5 in 2017.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The candidate attempts to report the main features of the line graph, identifying overall trends and peak figures such as the total reaching 3.5 in 2017. However, the response lacks a clear, cohesive overview and struggles to accurately report the specific data points. Many descriptions are vague or confused, referring to 'strangers staying at two varied places' and mentioning years in a haphazard manner. While some key trends are acknowledged, the lack of precision and underdeveloped comparisons mean the response falls short of fully satisfying the requirements for higher bands.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organization of the response is extremely weak, with an absence of logical paragraphing and poor overall progression. Sentences are disjointed and difficult to follow, such as 'Overall, these lines displaying were two categories of staying at two popular place'. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, and referencing is frequently unclear. The transitions between points about cruise ships, island stays, and totals feel repetitive and mechanical, severely disrupting the flow of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and often unnatural. The candidate uses inaccurate terms such as 'amount of travelers exploring specific place', 'strangers', and 'curies ship' instead of accurate equivalents. There are frequent word-choice and collocation errors that strain the reader's understanding. While the writer attempts some task-specific words like 'cruise ships', the lexical range is severely limited and inadequate for effective academic reporting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, and almost every sentence features significant errors. There are frequent issues with verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and sentence fragments, such as 'the line was started in 2010 at very weak point but after that, it was reaching bit in various years'. Punctuation is faulty, and complex sentence attempts are consistently flawed, leading to severe grammatical breakdowns that impede communication throughout the text.

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