Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph illustrate the figures of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island from 2010 to 2019.
Overall, it is clear that the total was highest figures, while who visitors prefer to stayin on island far high than the staying on cruise ships during the same period.
The total number of visitors started one millions and end of 3.5 millions visitors, this figures consider highest number of this period.Total risen the population of visitors around 2.5 millions over the seven-year period.
The other two type of tourists including stay on cruise ships and stay on island had not significant different, who tourists like to stay on cruise had only under one millions figures in their starting year and completed on 1.5 millions numbers, increased only 0.5 millions,it was considered lowest figures over the period. Moreover, who tourists prefer to stay on cruise ships, it begining on above the 0 millions and finnal end on two-millions, just rise their visitors population 2.5 millions during the same period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student attempts to report the main features and trends of the graph, mentioning the total number of visitors and comparing the two categories (cruise ships and island stay). However, there are significant factual inaccuracies in reading the data. For example, the student states the timeline is '2010 to 2019' when the graph clearly shows 2010 to 2017. Furthermore, the description of the trends for cruise ship and island stays is confused and contradictory in places, mixing up the figures between the two categories. While an overview is attempted, the inaccurate reporting of data points and lack of clear comparative synthesis restrict the score to Band 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is structured into an introduction and body paragraphs, attempting to group information. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by confusing referencing and poor use of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'The other two type of tourists including...' and repetitive use of 'who tourists' lead to mechanical and inaccurate referencing that makes the text difficult to follow. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion fails due to broken sentence structures and unclear relationships between ideas. Overall, the organisation falls short of Band 5 requirements due to frequent cohesive failures.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical range is very limited and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors that impede communication. The student relies on basic terms such as 'figures', 'numbers', and 'population', and uses highly ungrammatical collocations like 'who visitors prefer to stayin on island far high than'. Expressions like 'completed on 1.5 millions numbers' and 'finnal end on two-millions' demonstrate a weak control of vocabulary appropriate for an academic task. Spelling errors, such as 'finnal' and 'begining', further detract from the lexical quality, aligning the response with Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of faulty attempts at complex sentences. There are persistent, severe grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The line graph illustrate'), tense confusion, and missing prepositions or copula verbs ('Total risen the population', 'had not significant different'). Many sentences are severely distorted in structure, making them difficult to parse ('Moreover, who tourists prefer to stay on cruise ships, it begining on above the 0 millions...'). These pervasive and frequent errors place the writing firmly in Band 4.0.
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