Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line graph illustrates the million of visitor seeing a particular Caribbean island betwwen 2010 and 2017.
Overll, total start from the highest and throughout the period increase significantally. Although visitors staying on cruise ship start from the lowest point and then increase particularly.
In 2010 to 2012 guest visiting staying on cruise ship while after 2012 to 2017 rose up approximately 1.5%.
In addition, Visitors staying on island flutuate by the end of the period.
However, total visitor go up and hit the peak.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 85 words. Consequently, the information is presented in a very truncated and incomplete manner. While the student attempts to provide an overview ("total start from the highest and throughout the period increase significantally") and touches upon some data points, the lack of development and missing key comparisons severely limit the task response. Important trends, such as the overall growth from 1 million to 3.5 million visitors, are mentioned only vaguely without sufficient supporting detail. Therefore, the response falls into the lower band categories primarily due to severe under-length and limited coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text is organized into very short, single-sentence paragraphs, which prevents any logical progression of ideas. Although some basic cohesive devices and transition words are attempted, such as "Overll", "Although", and "In addition", their usage is mechanical and sometimes grammatically flawed. The referencing and logical links between sentences are weak, making the overall arrangement choppy and difficult to follow as a cohesive piece of academic writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The lexical range is extremely limited and repetitive, with noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text (e.g., "million" instead of "millions", "visitor seeing" instead of "visitors visiting", "betwwen", "Overll", "significantally", "flutuate"). The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like "tourists", "cruise ship", and "island", but frequent inaccuracies in word form and spelling impede clear communication at times and demonstrate a basic vocabulary control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ("total start", "visitors staying on cruise ship start"), missing prepositions, and incorrect verb forms. Punctuation is basic, and sentences often lack completeness or grammatical coherence (e.g., "Although visitors staying on cruise ship start from the lowest point and then increase particularly"), which causes difficulty for the reader.
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