Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given graph illustrates about tourism across in the Caribbean Island in between 2010 to 2017.
Overall, it is clear that the number of tourist is increased by the time in 2010, the number of tourist was 1 million and it is gained nearly about 3.5 million by the 2017.
In starting those tourist, who are staying cruise ship has gained the number from 0 to 0500,000 by the time it has fluctuations in that, but after all till 2017 it increased to 2 million .
Further more those tourist who are staying on island have a constant number and do not have any kind of fluctuations, but by the time the number was still constant till 2017, and the number was still on 1.5 million. Moreover, the total number of tourists have increased till 2017 and it reaches 1,000,000 to 3,500,000 by the time after all, it had lots of fluctuations in that .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph, identifying the overall upward trend from 1 million in 2010 to 3.5 million in 2017. It also mentions the two sub-categories: visitors staying on cruise ships and those staying on the island. However, there are several inaccuracies in reporting the specific data points. For instance, the student states that visitors staying on the island do not have any fluctuations and remained constant at 1.5 million, whereas the graph shows fluctuations (rising to 1.5 million by 2013 and dropping to 1.25 in 2016). Furthermore, the overall description of fluctuations is repetitive and lacks precision. While all parts of the prompt are addressed, the lack of data precision places this at Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response has a basic structure, including an introductory sentence and an overall summary. However, the organization is hindered by a lack of proper paragraphing, as the text is clumped together into a single block or poorly divided sentences. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and repetitively, such as the overuse of phrases like 'by the time' and 'further more'. Logical progression between ideas is weak, and referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in sentences like 'In starting those tourist, who are staying cruise ship has gained...'. These issues align with a Band 5.0 descriptor for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student attempts to use some topic-related vocabulary such as 'tourism', 'tourists', and 'fluctuations'. However, the range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'illustrates about', 'tourism across in the Caribbean Island', and 'gained the number'. Additionally, numerical expressions are poorly handled (e.g., '0500,000'). While the meaning is generally decipherable, the frequent lexical errors and lack of precision prevent the response from achieving a higher band score, making Band 5.0 an appropriate assessment.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent errors in verb tense, preposition usage, and article omission (e.g., 'the number of tourist is increased', 'staying cruise ship', 'do not have any kind of fluctuations'). Run-on sentences and comma splices also occur, such as in the second sentence. Although some basic structures are correct, the high frequency of grammatical errors causes some difficulty for the reader and restricts the score to Band 5.0.
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