Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
This graph represent the number of tourist visiting a particular Caribbean island in the 2010 and 2017 time frame.
Although it is clear that the overall number of visitors are increasing over time while the visitors staying on island remains a bit constant. The graph clearly shows that people are prefering more on staying on cruise ships.
From 2012 to 2017, visitors have been jumped from 1.5 million on 3.5 million.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response fails the minimum length requirement significantly, containing only 71 words against the mandatory 150-word minimum. Consequently, Task Achievement is heavily penalised. While the writer attempts an overview ('the overall number of visitors are increasing over time') and reports a few figures, the data provided is inaccurate and incomplete. For instance, the final sentence claims 'visitors have been jumped from 1.5 million on 3.5 million', which misrepresents the chart's timeline and figures (total visitors rose from 1 million in 2010 to 3.5 million in 2017). Due to the extreme brevity, missing details, and inaccurate data reporting, the response only minimally addresses the task.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text is extremely brief, consisting of only three very short paragraphs, which prevents any meaningful development of logical organisation or progression. There is a basic attempt to use cohesive devices ('Although', 'while', 'From 2012 to 2017'), but the overall structure is disjointed. Paragraphing is technically present due to line breaks, but sentences are not grouped into a coherent introductory, overview, and body structure. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the lack of length prevents the clear management of cohesion across a full response.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The lexical range is very limited and repetitive. The writer uses basic vocabulary such as 'number', 'tourist', 'graph', and 'increasing'. There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'visitors staying on island remains a bit constant' (instead of 'remained relatively stable') and 'people are prefering more on staying' (awkward phrasing). Spelling is generally accurate for the words used, but the overall resource is barely adequate to communicate the ideas simply, resulting in a low band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. There are several noticeable grammatical errors that detract from clarity, including subject-verb agreement errors ('This graph represent', 'number of visitors are'), incorrect prepositions ('in the 2010 and 2017 time frame', 'on 3.5 million'), and tense/aspect confusion ('have been jumped'). Complex structures are attempted with 'Although', but the execution contains errors. Frequent errors across a short text prevent the writer from demonstrating good control of grammar.
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