Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In this graph, showing the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean islands between 2010 and 2017.and today i am summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons.
In my opnion, graph shown there is millions of visitors level start from 0 to 4. 1st today i am talk about visitors started 0.25 in 2010 then increased 2011 to 0.5 again fall down to 2012 same as 2010 level, then incresed 2013 0.5 , then increased constantly 2014 at 1 , 2015 at 1.25, 2016 at 1.5 , 2017 at 2. Although , 2013 visitors graph constantly increased to 2017.
since, now i am talking about vistors staying on islands started at 2010, visitors are same 2010 and 2011 then increased 2012 rise 2013. besides 2013 to 2015 are same then fall down 2016 , then after in the end again rise in 2017. basically graph are rise 2010 to 2013 then are same 2017.
In my conclusion , visitors staying on cruise ships fall rise and visitors staying on island starting in rise 2010 to 2013 then same
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the visual data by outlining trends for tourists staying on cruise ships and staying on the island between 2010 and 2017. However, the student fails to treat the task with an appropriate academic tone, including conversational meta-language such as 'today i am summarize' and 'In my opnion'. The overview is weak, and the reporting of specific figures contains inaccuracies and lacks a coherent comparison of the overall trends, such as the total visitor numbers. The data points are described in a disjointed, bullet-point-like sequence rather than a well-synthesized summary. Consequently, the task achievement is limited, meeting the criteria for a band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization of the text is severely hindered by a lack of standard paragraph structure and inappropriate conversational links like 'since, now i am talking about'. Cohesive devices are either missing, repetitive, or mechanically forced. While the response does attempt to separate different trends into loose groupings, the progression of ideas is difficult to follow due to run-on sentences and a lack of clear referencing. Paragraphing is not used effectively, as the text is clumped into erratic blocks that do not guide the reader logically through the data. This level of organization aligns with a band 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on direct lifting or awkward phrasing from the prompt or visual elements (e.g., 'tourists visiting a particular caribbean islands', 'visitors staying on cruise ships'). There are numerous word choice errors and non-standard forms, such as 'fall down', 'incresed', and 'rise 2013'. The range of vocabulary is extremely limited and inadequate for discussing statistical trends with precision, demonstrating a performance characteristic of band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed simple sentences and failed attempts at complex structures that result in severe fragmentation and ungrammatical clauses. There is a total absence of correct punctuation and sentence boundaries, with numerous run-on sentences joined by commas instead of proper conjunctions or full stops (e.g., 'then increased 2011 to 0.5 again fall down to 2012 same as 2010 level'). Errors are frequent, pervasive, and often distort the intended meaning, matching the descriptors for band 4.0.
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