Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates information about the number of tourist vists particular carribean island categories in, those who stay on cruise ship, stay on island and show total visitors data between 2010 and 2017 measured in millions.
Overall, popularity of tourist visiting carribbean island increased through out the period. Numbers of vistors staying on cruise ship was quite low in the begning of period then experienced a dramatical rise during the period, figure of toursit staying on island were the lowest.
Visitors staying on cruise ship were at the lowest point in 2010 with not more than 0.5 millions of tourist. in 2011 experienced a slightly increased around 0.5 before slightly drop in figure in 2012 and and then experienced a substaintial growth over time without any drop reached 1 million visitors in 2014 and overtake the visitors staying on island in the mid of 2015 and 2016 and ended up with 2 millions visitors by 2017.
Incontrast figures of visitors staying of island were the highest figure in 2010 remain unchanged till 2011 and experienced a noticable growth till 2013 with 1.5 millions of visitos and remain unchanged till 2015 drop a slightly figure in 2016 before rising to maintain its constant position by 2017 with 1.5 millions of visitors.
Total visitors figure increased throught out the period from 1 million tourist in 2010 to 1.5 million by 2012 and experienced a substaintal growth over period and from 2 million visitors in 2013 and reached at the level of 3.5 million tourist by 2017 which were the highest number recorded.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and totals for each category shown on the graph between 2010 and 2017. An overview is attempted in the second paragraph, capturing the overall upward trajectory. Key data points, such as the starting and ending figures and crossover points, are generally included. However, there are minor inaccuracies in reading specific data points, such as stating that visitors staying on cruise ships were 'not more than 0.5 millions' in 2010 when the chart shows 0.25 million, and slight imprecisions with dates and figures. Despite these minor lapses, the main trends are adequately covered, fulfilling the requirements for Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is structured into an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs focusing on cruise ship visitors, island stay visitors, and total visitors respectively. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate ideas. However, the logical flow and cohesion are frequently hindered by awkward phrasing, run-on sentences, and repetitive use of cohesive devices like 'and then experienced'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and transitions between sentences feel mechanical rather than fluid. Overall, the essay maintains a coherent arrangement, but the faulty cohesion places it firmly at Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common terms such as 'dramatical rise', 'substaintial growth', and 'noticable growth'. However, there are numerous lexical and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'vists', 'carribean', 'begning', 'toursit', 'Incontrast', and spelling slips like 'substaintal'. Word formation and collocations are occasionally awkward, such as 'visitors staying of island'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main message, the frequent errors in spelling and word choice prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and run-on sentences lacking proper punctuation (e.g., 'Numbers of vistors staying on cruise ship was quite low in the begning of period then experienced a dramatical rise'). Verb tense consistency is also problematic in places. While simple structures are generally understandable, the high frequency of grammatical errors and lack of error-free complex sentences mean the writing sits at Band 5.0.
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