Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph illustrates, the number of tourists visiting in a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Overall it can be seen that, in the Caribbean island the total number of individuals were trying to enjoy in these island. Whereas, majority of youngster were been dicline on it to staying on island.

At the initial stages, in 2010, approximately one millions of visitors of total were coming on these island. However, to enjoyed their hactic routine from there lifestlye. In addition, in 2011, 1 millions was converted into 1.3 and after untill 3.5 millions of visitors was hiking at peak level.

Subsequently, to begnning in 2010 there was an cruise ship for all the residents to came free of cost to enjoy theis island. after that, till 2011 it was rising upto 0.5 millions but in 2012 it will be decline. the visitor on the cruise ship were passed thourgh 2 millions of people to visit in theis island. on the other hand, the visitors most staying in theis island for one or two weeks additionally it was flucuated and the millions of humans were been growing and diminshed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The student attempts to report the main features of the graph, mentioning the overall upward trend in total visitors and giving some specific data points such as the figures for 2010 and 2017. However, the response contains significant inaccuracies and misinterpretations of the data, such as claiming that cruise ships were free of cost and confusing visitor categories. Furthermore, the overview is extremely unclear and fails to effectively summarise the main trends. The response falls short of fully satisfying the requirements for Task Achievement, earning a band score of 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organisation and progression are confused. Cohesive devices are frequently misused, inappropriate, or cause logical breakdowns in the text, such as 'Consequently, to begnning in 2010...' and 'Whereas, majority of youngster...'. Referencing and pronouns are often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. The logical relationship between sentences is frequently disrupted by grammatical and lexical errors, resulting in a performance that aligns with Band 4.5.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical resource is very limited and heavily impeded by severe word choice errors and unnatural collocations. Examples include 'dicline on it', 'hactic routine', and 'millions of humans were been growing'. There are frequent errors in spelling, word formation, and basic vocabulary usage that repeatedly strain the reader and obscure the intended meaning. While the student attempts some topic-related vocabulary such as 'visitors' and 'cruise ship', the lack of control keeps the score at a Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of flawed attempts at complex structures. There are persistent, dense errors throughout the text, including incorrect verb tenses, faulty passives ('were been dicline', 'was hiking'), and incorrect prepositions ('visiting in a particular', 'coming on these island'). Simple sentences also contain basic agreement and structural errors. These errors frequently distort meaning and impede communication, corresponding to a Band 4.0.

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