Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting the island in Caribbean between the year 2010 and 2017.

Overall, it can be seen that intially individual loved to stayed on Caribbean island but eventually at last it shows decline in trend.and those visitors who stayed on cruise ships increased in trend over the years.

Firstly, in 2010 to 2011 visitors those who stayed on island leveled to aboved 0.5 millions. but after that it surge went to 1.5 millions visitors and stayed at the same till 2015 but it decline for 1 year and went to back again to 1.5million visitors who stayed on island.and visitors those who stayed on cruise ships in 2010 it incline for 1 year but decline back in 2012.then it demonstrate rise dramatically increase to 2 million in 2017.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to summarize the line graph, but it suffers from a significant drawback in task completion: it is incomplete and breaks off mid-sentence at the end ("In Total it"). Furthermore, the word count requirement of 150 words is not met, as the response contains only 138 words. While the student does attempt to identify some main features, such as the trends for visitors staying on cruise ships and those staying on the island, the overall description is inaccurate in places. For instance, the statement that individuals loved to stay on the island initially but eventually declined is partially flawed, as island stay visitors actually fluctuated before rising and settling. Due to the incomplete ending and failure to meet the minimum length, the task is only partially addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The organization of the text is very weak. The response is essentially presented as two very dense paragraphs, with the second paragraph attempting to lump together all the detailed data points without clear logical progression or adequate paragraphing. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, leading to a mechanical and confusing flow (e.g., abrupt transitions like "Firstly, in 2010 to 2011 visitors those who..."). Furthermore, referencing is unclear, and the text terminates abruptly in the middle of a sentence, severely disrupting any sense of overall coherence. Logical sequencing between ideas is largely absent.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The lexical range is quite limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic vocabulary to describe trends, using words like "decline," "increase," and "rise" repeatedly, often with awkward collocations or grammatical forms (e.g., "surge went to," "it incline for 1 year," "dramatically increase"). There are noticeable word choice errors and awkward phrasings throughout the text, such as "intially individual loved to stayed." While the vocabulary is adequate to convey the most basic topic of tourism, the frequent errors and lack of less common lexical items restrict the score to this band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors in tense consistency, word form, and sentence structure. Examples include "loved to stayed," "intially individual," and "it decline for 1 year." The response lacks a good variety of complex structures, and the attempts made are frequently faulty. Punctuation and capitalization are also problematic, as seen in run-on phrasing and missing periods. Most importantly, the grammatical flow is interrupted by the text breaking off completely at the end. These persistent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and impede clear communication.

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