Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The diagram illustrates the number of visitors travelling a particular Caribbean island during 2010 to 2017 and also need to tell about the people who visit this place in these years.

Firstly at the start up of the tour, the visitors staying on the cruise ships was at very low ratio of people and the visitors staying on island was at the good ratio. After the start up of one year, traveller staying on the cruise ship was widely increases but it not create a more difference than first year and its ratio of staying people on island increases a bit. After that year the visitors rapidly decreases nut its ratio of the people who stay at the island was increases year by year. After the three years its ratio of people who visit increases all of the years of the past and also increases the ratio of youth who staying on island. So at the last year its ratio in both types increases.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response fails to appropriately summarise the main features or make relevant comparisons from the graph. Instead of presenting data accurately (such as tourist numbers in millions between 2010 and 2017), the student attempts a vague narrative using highly informal and imprecise language such as "at very low ratio of people" and "increases a bit." Furthermore, the overview includes meta-language and instructions ("and also need to tell about the people"). Important trends, such as the overall rise from 1 million to 3.5 million visitors or the steady growth in cruise ship passengers, are entirely missed or severely misreported. This performance falls below the criteria for Band 4.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The organisation of the text is weak and lacks a logical progression. The student attempts to use some cohesive devices like "Firstly" and "After that year," but the sequence of time periods is confused and difficult to follow. Paragraphing is not handled properly, with the entire body of data squeezed into a single, rambling paragraph following the introduction. Referencing is also unclear, making it hard to determine which tourist category the student is referring to in sentences like "After the three years its ratio of people who visit increases." Overall, the information and ideas are not arranged coherently, aligning with a Band 4 descriptor.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and frequently inappropriate for an academic task. Phrases like "start up of the tour," "ratio of people," and "ratio of youth" demonstrate a very limited control of lexical items. Word choices are imprecise, and there are notable issues with collocation and word forms (e.g., "traveller staying on the cruise ship was widely increases"). Because the vocabulary is restricted and imprecise, it strains the reader and impedes clear communication, fitting the Band 4 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying on simple or heavily flawed complex sentences. There are frequent and severe grammatical errors throughout the text, such as subject-verb agreement issues ("the visitors staying on the cruise ships was"), incorrect tense usage, and awkward phrasing ("it not create a more difference than first year"). Punctuation and sentence boundaries also show instability. These persistent errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader and distort meaning, placing the performance securely in Band 4.

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