Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The chart illustrate the number of tourists visiting a caribbean island. Betbeen 2010 to 2017. And, the the number given in millions.chart also give information about visitors staying on cruise or island.
Overall, the total number of tourist increased during the period.The nuber of visitors staying on cruise ship also increased, while the number of tourists staying on island remained stable.
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In 2010, numer of visitors was 1 million total. About 0.25 million visitors stayed on cruise ship and 0.75 million people stayed in island.In 2011, visitors number increased round 1.25 millions and 0.5 million tourists stayes on ship while 0.75 million visitors stayed on island
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The student attempts to address the task by outlining some main features of the line graph, such as the overall increase in total tourists and the trends for cruise ship and island visitors. However, the response is severely underdeveloped and abruptly cuts off in 2011. Crucially, the length requirement of 150 words is not met, as the text contains only 107 words. This significantly impacts task completion, leading to a lower band placement. While some data points for 2010 and 2011 are reported, major trends spanning up to 2017 are entirely omitted.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response attempts basic paragraphing, separating the introduction, an overview, and specific data details. However, logical progression is hindered by sentence fragments and poor punctuation, such as 'Betbetween 2010 to 2017. And, the the number given in millions.chart also give information...'. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical, and referencing between sentences is occasionally unclear. The abrupt ending of the text further disrupts overall cohesion and structure.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying on words like 'number', 'tourists', and 'visitors'. There are numerous lexical and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'illustrate' instead of 'illustrates', 'caribbean' with a lowercase letter, 'Betbetween', 'nuber', and 'stayes'. While the writer attempts some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'cruise ship' and 'island', the limited range and frequent inaccuracies constrain the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with frequent basic errors. Examples of severe grammatical issues include subject-verb agreement errors ('The chart illustrate'), fragment sentences ('Betbetween 2010 to 2017'), and missing articles ('stayed on island'). Punctuation and capitalization are also poorly controlled, with stray letters like 'i' appearing before paragraphs. Due to the high frequency of basic grammatical errors and lack of complex structures, the performance aligns with band 4.0.
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