Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island in 2010 and 2017.
overall, In 2010 visitors was staying on cruise ships is 0 but it is fluctuated in 2012 and increased in 2017 around 2%. While, visitors was staying on island is 0.7% in 2010, but otherside its decreased compare than cruise ships around 1.5%.
The total number of visitors in caribbean island between 2010 and 2017 is 3.5%. which is highly more than others, and there has millions of visitors was coming in caribeean island. In 2010 total is only 1% but it is increased to 3.5% in 2017. In 2017 both are increased compare than island.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, standing at only 113 words, which significantly limits the development of ideas. Furthermore, the selection of data contains severe inaccuracies and misreadings of the graph. For instance, the student states that visitors staying on cruise ships was 0 in 2010 (the actual figure is 0.25 million) and uses percentages (%) instead of millions of visitors throughout the response. While an overall trend is attempted, key data points are incorrectly reported, and comparisons are confused. This places the performance firmly within the Band 4 descriptor for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text is divided into three short paragraphs, but the logical flow and progression are weak. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as starting the second paragraph with "overall, In 2010..." and misusing transition words like "While, visitors was staying on island..." and "otherside". Referencing between sentences is unclear, and the lack of a coherent structure throughout makes the text difficult to follow. Paragraphing is present, but the overall organization does not meet the standards of higher bands, aligning best with Band 4 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily reliant on simple terms from the prompt such as "visitors", "island", "cruise ships", and "tourists". There is a persistent misuse of units, substituting percentages (%) for millions, which indicates a severe lack of precision. Attempts to use less common vocabulary fail due to inappropriate collocations and word choices, such as "is fluctuated" and "compare than". These lexical errors noticeably strain the reader's understanding, reflecting Band 4 criteria.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are heavily flawed. There are frequent and intrusive errors in basic verb forms and agreement, such as "visitors was staying", "it is fluctuated", and "there has millions of visitors was coming". Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also handled poorly, with sentence fragments like "which is highly more than others". These frequent errors frequently distort meaning and impede communication, corresponding to a Band 4 score.
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