Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This line graph illustrates how many travelers visited in a specific Caribbean island from the year 2010 to 2020.
Firstly, the visitors stayed on cruise ships in 2010 start rising abour 0.3million, while its fluctuating rate up and down in 2011 ans 2012. But its start increasing in 2013 because people like to travel in different places and its comprised of 1 million in 2014.Although rate of visitors exceed with time and developmental factors are escalated with specfic interval of time.In 2015 the effecting rate of tourist constituted of 1.3 millions and substantial growth in number of tourist records about 2 millions individuals in a Caribbean island.
On the other side, visitors stayed in island shows moderate change in working capacity, meanwhile, it started to visit 1 million individuals in 2014 and its oscillation rate explored with plenty of time.Thus in 2017,inhabitants raised up to 2 millions for better economic growth in various parts of istand.On the contrary side, Total rate of both visitors,cruise ships and island indicate it augmentation rate made up of 3.5 millions with including population
In conclusion, albeit, visitors play a important role in enhancing envirnoment and strength of community.A balance approach is needed, for smooth working of transportation for visitors and crusie ships exibit highest number of visitors juxtaposed.Its developmental aspects multilply because of people interest and better facilities that gravitate more citizens.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by summarizing the main trends from the graph regarding tourists visiting a Caribbean island. However, there are several factual inaccuracies and misinterpretations of the data. For instance, the time frame is misstated as 2010 to 2020 instead of 2017, and the descriptions of trends for cruise ship and island visitors contain confusing figures and logic. While the student does mention overall trends and some specific figures (such as 2 million cruise ship visitors in 2017), the overall coverage is disjointed, and key comparisons are poorly articulated. The response falls into Band 5 because the data is only partially reported and interpreted with noticeable inaccuracies that affect clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, which provides a basic structure, but the internal organization and logical progression are weak. The use of cohesive devices is frequently mechanical, inaccurate, or inappropriate (e.g., 'Firstly', 'On the other side', 'On the contrary side'). Furthermore, referencing is often unclear, leaving the reader confused about which data series is being discussed. Paragraphing is attempted, but the flow of ideas lacks coherence and fails to guide the reader smoothly through the information. This places the response firmly in Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is quite limited and frequently inappropriate for an academic task. Words and phrases like 'working capacity', 'oscillation rate', 'inhabitants', and 'augmentation rate' are either misused or unnatural in this context. There are also frequent issues with word choice and collocation (e.g., 'effecting rate of tourist', 'visitors stayed in island'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey a general topic, the noticeable errors and strained phrasing cause difficulty for the reader, aligning with Band 5 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, incorrect verb tenses, and issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the visitors stayed on cruise ships in 2010 start rising', 'rate of visitors exceed', 'its oscillation rate explored'). Punctuation and sentence boundary errors are also common, resulting in run-on sentences and fragments. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher band, corresponding to a Band 4.5 or 5.0.
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