Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This line graph illustrates number of tourists visited in a specific Caribbean island from 2010 to 2020. Overall, the total number of tourists increased considerably during the period while number of visitors staying on island rose steadily before remaining stable, the figure for cruise ship tourists grew sharply and eventually became the larger group, the visitors stayed on cruise ships in 2010 started rising by about 0.3million, while its fluctuating rate went up and down in 2011 and 2012. But its started increasing in 2013 because people like to travel in different places and it’s comprised of 1 million in 2014. Although rate of visitors exceeds with time and developmental factors are escalated with specific interval of time. In 2015 the effecting rate of tourists constituted of 1.3 million and substantial growth in number of tourist records about 2 million individuals in a Caribbean island. On the other side, visitors staying in island shows moderate change in working capacity, meanwhile, it’s started to visit 1 million individuals in 2014 and its oscillation rate explored with plenty of time. Thus in 2017, inhabitants rose up to 2 million for better economic growth in various parts of island. On contrast , Total rate of both visitors, cruise ships and island indicate it augmentation rate made up of 3.5 million with including population. In conclusion, albeit visitors play a important role in enhancing environment and strength of community. A balanced approach is needed, for smooth working of transportation for visitors and cruise ships exhibit highest number of visitors juxtaposed. Its developmental aspects multiply because of people’s interest and better facilities that gravitate more citizens.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the task by summarizing the main trends on the line graph, correctly identifying that the overall number of tourists increased. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies regarding the data provided in the chart. For instance, the student states that the graph goes from 2010 to 2020, whereas it ends in 2017. Furthermore, many of the specific data points cited (such as cruise ship visitors being 1 million in 2014 and 1.3 million in 2015) do not match the visual data, and the text includes irrelevant speculation (e.g., 'because people like to travel in different places'). The response is presented as a single massive block of text without proper paragraphing. These issues limit the score to Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response suffers from a lack of clear organization and paragraphing, being written entirely as one single, dense block of text. Cohesive devices are frequently misused or awkward, such as 'On the other side,' 'On contrast,' and 'Thus in 2017'. The logical progression is obscured by run-on sentences and a lack of clear transitions between different data series. Although there is an attempt at an introduction and a concluding remark, the overall structure fails to meet the requirements for clear logical sequencing. This performance aligns with Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 for some overall coherence of thought, but better represented at Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The student attempts some less common vocabulary items such as 'substantially', 'fluctuating', 'oscillation', and 'augmentation', but their usage is frequently unnatural or inaccurate within the context of data reporting (e.g., 'effecting rate of tourists', 'working capacity', 'inhabitants'). There are also noticeable issues with word forms, such as 'visitors stayed on cruise ships' instead of 'staying'. While the vocabulary is adequate to convey a basic topic, the frequent awkward collocations and lexical errors prevent the score from reaching Band 6.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The text displays a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but it is heavily marred by frequent grammatical errors, run-on sentences, and poor punctuation. Examples include missing articles ('illustrates number of tourists'), incorrect tense usage ('its started increasing'), and fused sentences ('...grow sharply and eventually became the larger group, the visitors stayed...'). Many complex structures are faulty, which strains the reader's comprehension. Because errors are frequent and impede smooth communication at times, the grammar fits the Band 5.0 descriptor profile.

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