Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates the changes in the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island from 2010 and 2017.
Overview, the number of total visitors are increase too much from this time period. Also the number of visitors staying on cruise ship are rise during 2010 and 2017 however, the ratio of visitors staying on island slightly increase.
The visitors who staying on cruise ship is approximetley around 0.5 million in 2010 compared with who staying in island is 1 million, but it is climbed up to 2 million of visitors in 2017. The total visitors are sharpley increase from 1 to 3.5 million in the year of 2017.
On the other hand, the number of visitors staying on island is approximetley around 1 million in 2010 however it is slightly increase in year of 2017 around 1.5 million.
Overall, the number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island is grow in the factor of staying on cruise shi
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting key features and comparisons from the graph. However, there are notable inaccuracies in the data cited: for instance, the writer states that visitors staying on a cruise ship were 'approximetley around 0.5 million in 2010', whereas the actual figure is closer to 0.25 million. Similarly, the opening overview is overly simplistic, and the response trails off abruptly at the end ('staying on cruise shi'). While the main trends are touched upon, the lack of precision in data reporting and the incomplete ending keep this performance at a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is structured into short paragraphs, attempting an introduction, body details, and an overall summary. However, the progression is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and sometimes awkward, as seen in the transition 'Overview, the number of total visitors are increase too much'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the concluding sentence is cut off mid-word, demonstrating a lack of control over the overall cohesion and layout of the essay. Referencing is basic and repetitive, leading to an overall score of 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('increase', 'rise', 'visitors', 'staying'). There are frequent word choice and formation errors, such as 'are increase too much', 'are rise', and misspelt words like 'approximetley' and 'sharpley'. The student struggles with basic verb forms and collocations when discussing data trends. The lexical range is limited and barely adequate for the task, resulting in a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the text. The student frequently mixes up verb tenses and forms, such as 'the number of total visitors are increase' and 'The visitors who staying on cruise ship is'. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are generally faulty. Punctuation and basic sentence construction errors appear in almost every sentence, causing some difficulty for the reader and placing this text firmly at a Band 5.0.
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