Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting a specific Caribbean Island whose visitors staying on cruise ships, staying on island and total visitors from 2010 to 2017.
Overall, the total number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island had the highest as compared to the other visitors whose staying on cruise ship and staying on island. The total visitors starting point had one millions and it was increasing since the last seven years and reached the 3.5 millions of visitors.
However, in the other hand, number of tourists visitors staying on cruise ships had the highest range than the staying on island. In 2010 number of visitors staying on island had starting point highest about 0.75 millions its increased since the year 2014 and then decreased the visitors staying on island.
Furthermore, number of visitors staying on cruise ships had lowest millions of visitors in 2010 than the other activities but after 2015 visitors rate highest than staying on island and in 2017 year visitors number had 2 million.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response attempts to address all parts of the task by reporting the main categories, including visitors staying on cruise ships, those staying on the island, and the total. However, the information is only partially and mechanically presented, leading to under-developed descriptions of the trends. For instance, the opening sentence awkwardly tries to incorporate the categories directly into the introduction. While an overview is attempted, it lacks clarity in its comparisons, and some of the data points mentioned lack sufficient precision or contextual integration. To reach a higher level, the response needs to present a clearer, more fully developed overview of the main trends without getting bogged down in fragmented data points, ensuring all highlighted figures align more precisely with the visual data provided.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The text demonstrates some overall organisation by attempting to divide information into paragraphs, but there is a lack of clear progression throughout the response. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as the phrase 'However, in the other hand', which blends two distinct transitional expressions. Furthermore, referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which category is being discussed between sentences. Paragraphing is introduced, but internal transitions within paragraphs are weak. To improve Coherence and Cohesion, the writer should use a wider variety of accurate cohesive devices to link ideas smoothly, ensure precise referencing pronouns connect clearly to their antecedents, and establish a logical sequence of information from the general overview to specific details.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with noticeable constraints in word choice and collocation. The student relies on repetitive phrasing such as 'number of tourists', 'visitors staying on island', and 'visitors staying on cruise ships', rather than employing synonyms or paraphrasing. There are also inaccuracies in word formation and choice, such as using 'range' when discussing quantities, and awkward expressions like 'visitors rate highest'. These lexical shortcomings occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand their vocabulary range, using more precise terminology to describe statistical trends (such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable') and demonstrating greater control over collocations and word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and basic clauses. Attempts at more complex structures are frequently faulty, leading to ungrammatical constructions such as 'whose visitors staying on cruise ships' and 'visitors number had 2 million'. There are frequent errors in verb tense consistency, prepositions, and article usage, such as 'had starting point highest about 0.75 millions its increased'. These recurring errors can cause some difficulty and strain for the reader. To improve in this area, the writer needs to practice forming complex sentences accurately, paying close attention to subject-verb agreement, proper auxiliary verb usage, and the correct application of tense forms when describing past chronological data.
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