Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph depicts the number of travelers visiting Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
Overall, it is clear that the total numbers of tourists surged over the seven-year period starting from 2010. However, the visitors stayed on cruise ships witnessed a highest ratio than visitors remained on island.
In 2010, approximately 0.3 million tourists visit the Caribbean island but remained on their cruise ships . In contrast, about 0.75 million visitors are documented which stayed on island. In addition, these figures fluctuated and by the end of year 2011,the ratio of passengers stayed on their cruise plummeted to about 0.3 million passengers only. Meanwhile, the sudden rose were documented in the ratio of tourists who remained on island approximately 1.3 million travelers by the end of year 2011.
From 2012 to 2015, the massive rose were recorded in the number of visitors stayed on island reached to 1.25 million tourists, while vacationers that resided on their ships remained at 1.5 million.
Subsequently the total numbers of visitors surged to 3.5 million vacationers on Caribbean island.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to summarize the main trends in the line graph, but it addresses the task only partially. While it identifies some overall movements and specific figures, key data points are inaccurate or misreported. For instance, the statement that 'visitors stayed on cruise ships witnessed a highest ratio than visitors remained on island' contradicts the visual data for several years. Furthermore, the selection of data is inconsistent, and some ideas are limited and under-developed, such as the vague summaries of the later years. To reach a higher band, all parts of the visual data must be reported accurately, avoiding factual errors regarding which category was higher and ensuring that the overview properly reflects the main trends without sweeping inaccuracies.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response displays some organization with an introductory sentence, an overview paragraph, and body paragraphs, but there is no clear overall progression of information. Cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive, such as the mechanical and confusing use of transitions like 'In addition,' 'Meanwhile,' and 'Subsequently.' Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas lacks logical sequencing, making the progression difficult to follow at times. Referencing is also occasionally unclear. To improve, you should ensure that each paragraph has a distinct focus, sequence your ideas chronologically or topically with clearer logical links, and use a wider variety of cohesive devices naturally without overusing basic connectors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary range used is limited but minimally adequate to convey basic information about the graph. There are noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word formation that can cause some difficulty or confusion for the reader, such as writing 'the sudden rose were documented' instead of 'a sudden rise was documented' or referring to a 'ratio' when meaning 'number' or 'proportion'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary result in awkward phrasing. To achieve a higher score, you should build a stronger repertoire of standard graph-reporting language, paying close attention to noun and verb forms (e.g., 'rise' versus 'rose') and ensuring precise vocabulary choices for describing trends and data points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences and basic past tense forms. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to frequent grammatical errors that can cause difficulty for the reader. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement and plurals, such as 'the total numbers of tourists surged' paired with singular verb forms or incorrect passive constructions like 'visitors stayed on island' instead of 'visitors who stayed on the island'. Punctuation and article usage are also inconsistent. To progress, you need to practice forming accurate complex sentences with subordinate clauses, improve your control over verb tenses and passive voice, and eliminate basic agreement errors.
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