Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of tourists who visited a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. It also shows the total number of visitors who stayed on the island and those who stayed cruise ships.
Overall, The total number of visitors increased considerably over the period. While the number of visitors staying on the island mostly same of 2013.Meanwhile, the number of cruise ship visitors grew very first.
In 2010, The total number of visitors was 1 million.This figure rose significantly about 1.5 million in 2012 .While the total number of tourist increase notebly arround 2.7 million in 2015. It was same lable grew of 2.7 million in 2010.Wheares it was surged to 3.5 million in 2017.
For those stayingon the island the number started at about 0.7 million in 2010 and rose to 1.5 million in 2013. After that it do not change much and stayed at 1.5 million until the end.
The number of visitors staying on cruise ships was very low increase only 0.3 million in 2010.However, after it increase slightly about 0.5 million in 2011.In 2012 this number started to rise quickly by 2017. It reached 2 million.Which is higher than the number of people staying on the island.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by presenting an overview and reporting the main features, such as the overall growth and the specific trends for visitors staying on the island versus those on cruise ships. However, some areas are under-developed or inadequately supported. For instance, the overview contains vague phrasing ('while the number of visitors staying on the island mostly same of 2013') and some data points are inaccurate or poorly contextualised, such as stating that the total figure 'was same lable grew of 2.7 million in 2010'. Key data is selected from the visual, but the lack of precise development and occasional confusion in reporting trends keep this part of the assessment at the current level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response achieves a coherent overall arrangement with a logical division into paragraphs, starting with an introduction and overview, followed by body paragraphs detailing the data. However, cohesion is sometimes faulty or mechanical. Referencing and linking devices are occasionally misused or absent, resulting in disjointed sentences. For example, expressions like 'While the number of visitors staying on the island mostly same...' and abrupt sentence boundaries ('In 2010, The total number of visitors was 1 million.This figure rose significantly...') disrupt the flow. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal logical progression within the body paragraphs requires more refined transitional markers to achieve a higher standard.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms such as 'illustrates', 'considerably', 'significantly', and 'surged'. However, there are noticeable limitations and inaccuracies in word choice, collocation, and word formation throughout the text. Examples include 'mostly same of 2013', 'very first' instead of 'very fast', 'increase notebly arround', and 'same lable grew'. Spelling and morphological slips—such as 'notebly' and 'arround'—also occur. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they restrict the vocabulary score, as the writer's attempts at less common lexical items often lack precision and natural collocation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The writing displays a mix of simple and some complex sentence forms, demonstrating an attempt to use varied structures. However, there are frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and article usage. Issues include missing verbs ('While the number of visitors staying on the island mostly same'), incorrect prepositions or phrasing ('stayingon the island', 'increase only 0.3 million'), and faulty punctuation (such as missing spaces after periods and fragmented sentences like 'Which is higher than the number of people staying on the island.'). Although the meaning can generally be understood, these grammatical inaccuracies are common enough to prevent the response from reaching a higher band.
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