Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The above statistics shows the the number of visitors came to Carribean Island for travelling from the year 2010 to 2017.
In the above graph, Y axis shows the number of vistors in millions and X axis shows year count from [redacted phone].
The three different curving lines illusrates the number of individuals stayed on cruise ship, on island and the line at top signifies dots show the total persons.
From 2010 the number of people on cruise ship are relatively lower than half and million which goes up to 1 million in a year and went back to same number of people in 2010 in a year. Since from the last years the number of tourists gradually raised and in 2017 it was around 2 miilion which is quadruple than 2010.
Community who enjoys staying on island is 0.75 million at 2010, which was also similar in 2011. Over the next 3 years 1.5 million of tourists enjoys on island from [redacted phone]. In 2026 we see the downfall in this tourist category upto 250 thousand visitors. In 2017 the chart goes upto 1.5 million vistors again.
In comparison, From [redacted phone] the majority of people enjoy staying on island which is quite impressive, but afterwards people also start enjoying to stay on cruise ship rather than staying on island in 2017.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to present an overview of the graph showing the number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017, but the task is only partially addressed. While some main features are mentioned, such as the overall totals and the categories of visitors staying on cruise ships versus on the island, the data reported contains several inaccuracies and confusion. For instance, the student states that in 2026 there is a downfall (referring to 2016 based on the context), and some of the figures for cruise ship and island visitors are misread or unclearly described, such as claiming the number went back to the same number of people in 2010 in a year. Furthermore, the overview lacks clarity regarding the broader trends across the entire period. To reach a higher level, the response needs to accurately report the data without factual errors and provide a clearer, more coherent summary of the main trends and comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response shows some organization with paragraphs dividing the introduction, body details, and a concluding comparison, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. The logical flow is hindered by awkward transitions and confusing references. Cohesive devices are used in a somewhat mechanical or repetitive way, such as starting multiple sentences with temporal markers like 'In the above graph,' 'From 2010,' and 'In 2017.' Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas lacks clear structural coherence, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of tourist categories smoothly. To improve coherence, the writer should ensure that ideas are logically sequenced with a clear progression from start to finish, and use a wider variety of appropriate cohesive links without over-relying on basic time phrases.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'quadruple' and 'downfall', but these are accompanied by noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word form, including 'Carribean', 'illusrates', 'vistors', and 'raised' instead of 'rose'. There are also awkward phrasings like 'Community who enjoys staying on island' and 'people also start enjoying to stay on cruise ship'. These errors and spelling mistakes occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to expand their vocabulary range, ensure correct word forms and spellings, and use more precise lexical items appropriate for reporting statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences alongside a few clumsy attempts at complex forms. There are frequent grammatical and punctuation errors that can cause difficulty for the reader, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The above statistics shows the the number of visitors came', 'The three different curving lines illusrates', 'the number of people on cruise ship are'), missing articles ('on cruise ship', 'on island'), and incorrect verb tenses or forms. Punctuation and preposition use within grammatical patterns are also inconsistent. To improve, the writer must practice forming accurate simple and complex sentences, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and article usage, and reduce the frequency of basic grammatical errors.
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