Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates the number of visitors who visited a caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
Overall, in 2010 million tourists visited to island and with the passage of time the number of visitors increases. During this visit some of tourist prefer staying at cruise ship while others choose staying at island in 2010.
Looking at the remaining figures, in 2011 more than half milloion people want to stay at cruise ship. In 2012 the number of visitors decreases but after that most people wanted to stay at cruise ship and reaches 1 million in 2014.In addition, in initial years people preferences were different they want to stay on island rather than at cruise ship more than half million people.In 2014 its amount increase upto one and a half million people.
the number of people who prefer to stay at island started downfall in 2016 and reach 1.3 milllion.However, more and more people prefer to staying on a cruise ship in the upcoming years and reaches to two million people. The total number of visitors also increases with the passage of time and in 2017 three and a half million people visited carribean island.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the task only partially because the data is presented with significant inaccuracies and a lack of precise reporting. While the overview attempts to capture general trends, it contains basic mathematical and factual errors, such as stating that 'in 2010 million tourists visited to island' and misinterpreting the scale and specific figures. Key features, such as the total number of visitors reaching three and a half million in 2017, are mentioned, but the overall presentation lacks a fully developed overview and clear comparative analysis throughout. Ideas are limited and under-developed, and the misreading of data points (such as confusing visitor categories and quantities) prevents the response from achieving a higher level of precision and completeness.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some basic organisation with attempts at paragraphing, but the response lacks a clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are repetitive, mechanical, and occasionally inaccurate, such as abrupt transitions like 'Looking at the remaining figures' and 'In addition'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical relationship between sentences and ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph coherence is frequently disrupted by disconnected sentences and abrupt shifts in data focus. To improve, the writer needs to use a wider and more accurate range of cohesive devices to link sentences smoothly and ensure a logical, easy-to-follow progression of information throughout the report.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. There are noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word form, such as 'milloion', 'amount increase', 'downfall', and spelling errors like 'carribean'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, but these attempts often lead to unnatural phrasing or inaccuracies that cause some difficulty for the reader. To move up, the student needs to expand their range of vocabulary related to data trends and graphs, and ensure greater accuracy in word formation, spelling, and collocations when describing increases, decreases, and proportions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences, with attempts at complex sentences often being faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('staying at cruise ship'), incorrect verb tenses and forms ('the number of visitors increases', 'reaches to two million'), and punctuation mistakes (such as missing spaces after periods). These frequent errors can cause difficulty for the reader and obscure the intended meaning. To improve, the writer must focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring correct subject-verb agreement, using appropriate articles, and controlling verb tenses when describing past data.
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