Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
the line graph illustrate the number of visitors visiting in Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
tourist in 2010 is falling visiting staying on crusine ships, the grapgh shows fauctuation were noticed from 2012 to 2017 in the island. over the following period in 2012 was falling to 1%, an increased of 2% was noticed in the visitors staying on ship crusine. as compared with island in 2010 was increased in 0.9% the profit were similar in 2013, 2014 and 2015 that was 1.5%, the island was fall in 2017 with 1.4%.
Moreover the total tourist is increased peak of the sky stood at 3.5% in 2017, eventually reaching highest peak . In contrast flactuated were noticable from 2012 to 2016 inthe total of the visitor to stay.
overall, it is evident that highest peak of the sky is total of the tourist in 2017 and the lowest of the visitors stay on island in 2017 was falling. notable features is that significant changes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarize the line graph, but it addresses the task only minimally. The writing contains numerous inaccurate data points, such as confusing percentages with millions or stating incorrect figures like '1%' or '0.9%', which do not reflect the visual data. While an overview is attempted in the final paragraph, it is extremely vague and fails to clearly present the main trends, such as the overall upward trajectory of the total visitors or the distinct paths of cruise ship versus island-staying tourists. To improve, the student must carefully read the data from the graph and report the key features accurately rather than inventing random numbers and confusing units of measurement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response shows an attempt to structure the writing into paragraphs, but information and ideas are not arranged coherently. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow, and the transitions between sentences feel disjointed. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as repetitive phrases like 'Moreover' and 'In contrast' which do not connect the points logically. Additionally, referencing is often unclear, leaving the reader confused about which data series is being discussed. To move to a higher band, the student needs to organize the response with a clear introduction, body paragraphs grouped by logical themes or trends, and an overview, using cohesive ties naturally and appropriately to guide the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent lexical errors that strain the reader's understanding. Words are often misused or combined incorrectly, such as 'fauctuation' instead of fluctuation, 'crusine ships' instead of cruise ships, and confusing use of 'profit'. There is a lack of appropriate vocabulary for describing statistical trends, such as rising, falling, or fluctuating. To improve lexical resource, the student should build a reliable repertoire of standard graph-reporting vocabulary, paying close attention to correct spelling, word forms, and collocations when describing changes in data over time.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, and errors are frequent throughout the text. There are numerous issues with verb forms, tense consistency, and subject-verb agreement, such as 'the line graph illustrate', 'tourist in 2010 is falling', and 'the island was fall'. Basic grammatical patterns are handled incorrectly, and punctuation is erratic. These frequent errors often obscure the intended meaning and cause significant difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher band, the student needs to practice fundamental grammatical structures, ensuring proper subject-verb agreement, accurate verb tenses for past data, and correct formation of simple and complex sentences.
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