Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates, the count of visitors on Caribbean island during an epidemic period from 2010 to 2017.

overall, Millions of visitors in total always on the top as it can be seen clearly from the graph it ended up on 3.5 millions viewers, althrough, the visitors less often stay on ships compared on island.

In 2010, visitors stayed on the ship accounted for less than 0.5 millions but eventually, in 2011 it reach up to 0.5 millions, in the remaining years it shows fluctuation, it ended with a significant development up made up 2 millions visitors. compared to the tourists who stayed on the island are much higher, in 2010 it is accounted for less than one million tourists. in 2013 it have a proportion of 1.5 million visitors than at the remaining years it is roughly the same. The total tourists remained on the top owing for the begging to the end it's on peak in 2017 accounted for 3.5 millions tourists.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the overall rise in total visitors, correctly noting that the figure reaches 3.5 million in 2017, and you compare cruise-ship visitors with those staying on the island. However, the overview is not fully accurate: cruise-ship numbers were lower than island-staying numbers in most years, but they exceeded them in 2017, so saying they were “less often” on ships is too broad. Some key trends are also under-reported. Island-staying visitors rose to about 1.5 million by 2013 and then remained broadly stable, while the total levelled off at about 2.75 million in 2015–16 before rising. More precise comparisons and a clearer overview would make the main features better developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, an overview, and details about the two visitor groups and the total. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “In 2010” and “compared to” signal comparisons. However, the progression is not consistently clear because several trends are combined in long, loosely connected sentences. The final sentence repeats the point that the total peaked in 2017 rather than adding a distinct feature, and links such as “althrough” and “owing for” do not express the intended relationships clearly. Separate the overview from the detailed comparisons, group related figures together, and use accurate linking phrases to show contrast and change over time.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a graph, including “accounted for,” “fluctuation,” “proportion,” and “peak.” However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “epidemic period” introduces an unsupported context, “viewers” is not the right term for tourists, and “significant development up” does not clearly describe an increase. “Millions of visitors in total always on the top” is also an imprecise way to describe the total series. Aim for standard data-reporting language such as “the total number,” “rose,” “remained stable,” and “reached a peak,” and check collocations and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to use longer sentences and time clauses, but the structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some relationships unclear. For example, “it reach up to 0.5 millions” has an incorrect verb form and number agreement, while “in 2013 it have a proportion” also has an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “compared to the tourists…” lacks a clear grammatical connection to the preceding point, and “the total tourists remained on the top owing for the begging to the end” is difficult to parse. Capitalisation after full stops and comma use are inconsistent. Practise accurate simple past forms and build comparisons in shorter, complete sentences before adding more complex clauses.

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