Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph tracks the amount of visitors visiting a particular area called caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.

Overall, The graph shows the total number of visitors visited the caribbean island. Furthermore, they divided into two segments where it shows many people showed interest to stay on cruise ship and other visitors prefered staying on island.

Firstly, the total number of visitors in 2010 was 1 million and it shows the upward trend in 2012 there are 1.5 million. and it climb rapidly to 2014 was upto 2.5 million visitors. and it remain steadily until 2016. Hit the leak to 3.5 million visitors of total in 2017.

Whereas, the visitors staying on island recorded 0.75 in 2010 and remain constant till 2011. and takeoff untill 2013 with 1.5b

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give some relevant figures, including the total rising from 1 million in 2010 to 3.5 million in 2017 and island-based visitors reaching 1.5 million by 2013. However, the response covers the data only partially: it stops partway through the island series and does not report the cruise-ship trend, despite this being a key feature. The overview is also unclear and does not summarise the main pattern accurately; for example, the claim that people showed interest in both types of stay does not explain how their numbers changed. The response is 21 words below the required minimum, which contributes to its limited coverage. Include a complete overview and compare both categories across the period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph beginning with “Firstly” to describe totals. “Whereas” signals a shift to the island-stay figures. However, the progression is not sustained: the final paragraph ends abruptly at “1.5b,” and the cruise-ship data is not given a clear place in the report. Several sentences are joined with repeated “and,” while full stops create fragments such as “and it climb rapidly to 2014 was upto 2.5 million visitors.” This makes relationships between stages difficult to follow. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and the main comparisons, and connect changes with clear time references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “upward trend,” “total number,” and “remain constant,” so the reader can recognise the general topic. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “amount of visitors,” “takeoff” for a numerical increase, and “Hit the leak” for reaching a peak. “Prefered” is also misspelled, and “1.5b” is unclear as a data expression. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to understand. Choose precise reporting language and use it consistently—for example, “the number of visitors,” “rose,” and “peaked at”—and check spelling and number notation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer descriptions, but the range of sentence structures is narrow and errors are frequent. Verb forms and tense are often faulty: “the total number … was 1 million and it shows” shifts tense, while “it climb rapidly” and “it remain steadily” lack correct past-tense forms. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also problematic, as in “in 2012 there are 1.5 million. and it climb rapidly,” where a new sentence begins with a lower-case conjunction and the clauses are not well controlled. The overview’s “they divided into two segments” also has an unclear subject and verb construction. Practise writing complete past-tense sentences and checking subject–verb agreement and punctuation.

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