Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Overall, the total line shows an upward trend and increased sharply, while the number of visitors staying on cruise ship rise and then down in 2012, after that again rising gradually. At the beginning, visitors staying on island is constant and then flew up slowly, but at the point in 2013 restable from 2015. After that fluctuated between 2015 to 2017.

In the begin, the number of visitors staying on cruise ship increased and then decreased. After that again rise sharply and overtake the island visitors line. Althrough, the total number of visitors boosted quickly and stable between 2015 to 2016 and again heightened.

In contrast, the number of vistors staying on island is stable between 2010 to 2011 and then increased around 2013. While that, again constant between 2013 to 2014 and then decreased in 2016. Moreover, again upword trend in 2017.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the overall rise in total visitors and describe the broad patterns for both accommodation groups, including the cruise-ship figure overtaking island visitors by the end. However, the account is only partially developed: it gives few precise figures, and some descriptions are unclear or inaccurate. For example, cruise-ship visitors do not rise gradually throughout; they fluctuate early on before increasing, while island visitors are broadly stable from 2013 to 2015 rather than simply “restable from 2015.” The overview also says the island figure “fluctuated between 2015 to 2017,” although it falls and then rises. The response is 147 words, three short of the required minimum; this limits the space available to report and compare key data. Add selected figures and state the main contrasts more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an identifiable opening, an overview, and paragraphs describing the trends, so the reader can recognise the intended organisation. However, progression is weak because the same island trend is repeated in the second and final paragraphs, and the account moves between series without a clear comparison structure. Linking expressions such as “After that,” “In contrast,” and “Moreover” are frequent, but some do not establish a clear relationship between the ideas that follow. For example, “While that” is difficult to interpret, and “After that fluctuated” lacks a clear subject. Organise the details into a paragraph for total visitors and one comparing the two visitor groups, and use fewer, more precise transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “upward trend,” “constant,” “increased,” and “decreased,” and the topic remains understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, or collocation errors make parts of the report awkward or unclear. Examples include “flew up slowly,” “restable,” “Althrough,” “vistors,” and “upword trend.” “Boosted quickly” and “heightened” are also unnatural choices for describing visitor numbers. Aim for accurate, conventional trend language and vary it selectively—for instance, describe a figure as rising, remaining stable, or reaching a peak. Proofreading spelling and choosing natural collocations would make the comparisons easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses joined with “while” and “after,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur in phrases such as “the number of visitors staying on cruise ship rise” and “the total number … stable,” where the verb forms do not fit the subject or sentence. Articles and number are also problematic in “on cruise ship” and “visitors staying on island.” Some sentence fragments or incomplete constructions, such as “While that, again constant between 2013 to 2014,” make the intended relationship difficult to understand. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and finite verb, then check tense, singular/plural agreement, and articles. More accurate control of these basic patterns would make your attempted complex sentences clearer.

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