Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

There are million of visitors who visited Caribbean island back in 2010 to 2017 but the peak was in the year between 2016 and 2017.Also tourists were staying on cruise and on island were about 1.5 to 2 million. The people who were living on ships were at highest in the years from mid 2012 to the 2015 almot 1.5 million visitors visited caribbean after that there was a bit fall of 1 lac toursits stay on cruise in 2016 . when the year 2017 started propotion of people became reach at about 15 lacs again.

In the year 2010,2012 and 2013 the crowd was least among all the years but the people who lived on island during there holiday period was least in 2012 and peak in 2017 but th

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the period covered and mention both visitor groups, but the response reports the graph only minimally and does not provide a clear, accurate overview of its main pattern. For example, cruise-ship visitors did not peak around 2012–2015: they rose to about 1.5 million in 2016 and 2 million in 2017. The claim that island visitors peaked in 2017 is also inaccurate; their highest level was about 1.5 million, reached in several years. The final sentence is unfinished, and there is no clear comparison of the overall total, which climbed from about 1 million to 3.5 million. The response is 19 words below the required minimum. To improve, select the main trends, report key figures accurately, and complete the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to move from general comments about the period to details about the two types of accommodation, and phrases such as “after that” and “In the year” signal time relationships. However, the ideas are not arranged into a clear, coherent summary. Several points are crowded into one long passage, and the shift between cruise-ship visitors, island visitors, and total numbers is difficult to follow. The final phrase, “but th,” leaves the response incomplete and interrupts progression. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and supporting details, and group information by series or by stages in the timeline. Clear links such as “By contrast” and “Overall” would help readers understand the comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “visitors,” “cruise,” “island,” “peak,” and “fall,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several choices are inaccurate or unclear for describing a graph. “People who were living on ships” suggests permanent residence rather than tourists staying on cruise ships, while “crowd was least” does not clearly describe visitor numbers. There are also spelling errors, including “almot,” “toursits,” and “propotion,” which reduce precision. Aim for standard graph language and accurate spelling, such as “the number of visitors,” “reached a peak,” and “declined slightly.” This would make the comparisons clearer and more appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “but” and “after that,” but sentence control is weak and errors frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. The opening, “There are million of visitors who visited Caribbean island,” has problems with number, article use, and tense. In “the peak was in the year between 2016 and 2017,” the time expression is not formed clearly, and the long sentence beginning “The people who were living on ships” contains several clauses without effective punctuation. The final sentence is incomplete. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then add accurate comparisons using past-tense forms such as “rose,” “remained,” and “fell.”

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