Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph shows the number of tourists visiting a major caribbea island between in different years 2010 to 2017.

It can vividly seen that millions of tourists visiting was rapidly increased from 1 millions tourists to 3.5 millions tourists in 6 years. There were two types of tourists that some was living on cruise ships as well as some on island.However, in 2010 to 2011 the visitors of cruise was remained same but after that 2012 to 2015 were increased 1 millions tourists to approx 1.5 million visitors that remained same for 3 years.But in 2015 the visitors were start decline and it reached 1.2 millions of visitors in 2016. In island visitors start the graph rise in 2010 to 2011 0 to 0.5 million of visitors but after in all years it increased 2010 0 million of visitor to 1.5 mili

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s subject and mention the overall rise in total visitors from about 1 million to 3.5 million, which is a relevant main feature. However, the account is incomplete and several details are inaccurate or unclear: cruise-ship visitors did not remain the same from 2010 to 2011, and their rise to 2 million by 2017 is omitted. The island figures are also misreported: they began at about 0.75 million, not zero, and generally fluctuated around 1.25–1.5 million rather than rising steadily. The response ends mid-sentence and lacks a clear, accurate overview of the contrasting trends. It is also 8 words below the required minimum. Include the full period and select the key figures accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: you introduce the graph and then discuss the two visitor groups, using time references such as “in 2010 to 2011” and “after that.” This gives the reader some sense of chronology. However, the ideas are crowded into one paragraph, and the account does not progress clearly from an overview to well-organised details. Connectors such as “but after that” and “However” are used awkwardly, while the shift from cruise visitors to island visitors is not clearly signalled. The final phrase, “to 1.5 mili,” leaves the report unfinished and disrupts its flow. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and details, and group each series’ changes in a clear sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “tourists,” “visitors,” “cruise ships,” “increased,” and “decline,” so the general subject is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “visitors of cruise,” “living on cruise ships,” and “the graph rise.” Repetition of “visitors” and “millions” also makes the description less precise. There are spelling and form errors, including “caribbea” and “mili,” which reduce clarity. Aim to use standard chart language consistently, for example “cruise-ship visitors,” “visitors staying on the island,” and “the figure rose.” This would make comparisons more concise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences with time clauses and contrast, for example, “However, in 2010 to 2011 … but after that…,” showing an effort to connect ideas. However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “It can vividly seen,” “millions of tourists visiting was rapidly increased,” and “the visitors of cruise was remained same.” There are recurring problems with verb forms, subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries. The final sentence is incomplete, and punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after full stops. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using correctly formed clauses, such as “The total rose, while island-based visitors remained relatively stable.”

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