Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph below illustrates the number of visitors reportedly visit on a caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. The total of 3.5 millions people were engaged in this caribbean island by the end of year 2017 and starting from 1 million in year 2010.
In 2010, Visitors staying on cruise ships numbers are increasing till 2011 after that there's a blow down changes in 2012 going forward the graph will increase rapidly and end up by 2 millions visitors by 2017. Futhermore visitors staying on island had a similar number of tourist in initial 2 years 2010 to 2011 and after that the numbers will blown up rapidly and made some drastic up and down in between the year and by the inital year of 2017 they had almost 1.5 millions visitors.
In conclusion the total number of visitors are starting from 1 million to end up by 3.5 million in the year of 2017.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the overall rise in total visitors, from 1 million in 2010 to 3.5 million in 2017, and include both visitor categories. However, the account is only partly accurate and the main features are not clearly selected. Cruise-ship visitors did not rise continuously: they fell from 0.5 million in 2011 to 0.25 million in 2012, then increased to 2 million. Island-staying visitors rose to 1.5 million by 2013, remained around that level, dipped in 2016, and recovered in 2017; describing this as “drastic up and down” overstates the variation. A clearer overview should compare the steady growth in the total and cruise-ship figures with the relative stability of island visitors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic structure: an opening statement, a paragraph about the two categories, and a concluding sentence. This gives the reader some organisation, and “Furthermore” signals a move to the second category. However, progression within the main paragraph is difficult to follow because several years and trends are compressed into long sentences. Phrases such as “after that” and “going forward” do not always make the time sequence precise, while the conclusion repeats the opening rather than adding a useful comparison. Organise the report into a concise overview followed by separate, clearly sequenced details for the total and the two categories, using year markers to guide the reader.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “visitors,” “cruise ships,” “total,” and “numbers,” so the subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the report awkward or unclear. For example, “blow down changes” does not describe a fall in a graph, and “numbers will blown up rapidly” is not a natural way to report an increase. “Drastic up and down” also exaggerates the island-staying figures, which are mostly stable after 2013. Use precise trend language consistently, such as “fell,” “rose,” “remained stable,” and “reached,” and check spelling in words such as “Caribbean” and “initial.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, but the range of sentence structures is limited and errors are frequent enough to make some statements difficult to interpret. For example, “The total of 3.5 millions people were engaged” has problems with agreement and sentence construction, while “numbers are increasing till 2011” shifts tense in a report about past data. The clause “after that the numbers will blown up” also has an incorrect verb form, and “by the inital year of 2017” is not grammatically clear. Use the past simple for the period shown and build shorter, complete sentences before attempting more complex structures. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and plural forms.
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