Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The linear representaion depicts the information about the count of travellers visiting a Caribbean island in 2010 and 2017.

In an overview, it is clearly seen that highest million of tourists stayed total and least number of individuals stayed on cruise ships and island.

To begin with, near about 1 million of people stayed total in the initial year which inclined rapidly until the end of the mentioned period about 3.5 million in 2017. Apart from this, 0.7 million of travellers were abide on island which remained stable in 2011 then sudden rose seen till 2015 nearly 1.5 million. Howevre, this count merely declined in the next year then it agian stood on the same number 1.5 in 2017.

Moving ahead the remaining details, around 0.4 million people stayed on cruise ships in 2020 which followed fluctuation in 2011 and 2012. Therafter, rest of the given years this number increased at an alraming pace and in 2017 around 2 million individuals stayed on cruise ships.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the overall rise in total visitors, from about 1 million to 3.5 million, and describe the island-staying figure as broadly stable after reaching around 1.5 million. These are relevant main features. However, the overview is unclear: saying the “highest million of tourists stayed total” does not clearly compare the series, and “least number ... stayed on cruise ships and island” is inaccurate because cruise-ship visitors were not consistently the smallest group. There is also a significant date error: cruise-ship figures are described as beginning in 2020, although the chart starts in 2010. Some trends are only loosely reported, so select the key comparisons more precisely and support them with accurate dates and figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the island and cruise-ship figures. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in “Apart from this” and “Moving ahead the remaining details,” which do not clearly signal the relationship between the data. The overview also does not establish a clear comparison to guide the report. Some linking words, such as “However” and “Thereafter,” are used mechanically or where the connection is not fully clear. Group the main trends more logically and use transitions that accurately show contrast, continuation, or change.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of vocabulary, including “depicts,” “remained stable,” “declined,” and “fluctuation,” and the general topic is usually understandable. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing a graph, such as “linear representaion,” “highest million,” “abide on island,” and “alarming pace.” Spelling errors, including “Howevre,” “agian,” and “Therafter,” also make the writing less controlled. Some substitutions for “people” and “travellers” do not improve precision; “visitors” is the clearest term here. Aim for accurate, conventional trend language and check spelling, rather than choosing elaborate expressions that do not fit the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses linked with “which,” “then,” and “however,” so there is some variety in structure. The main trends can generally be understood, but errors in verb forms and sentence construction recur. For example, “which inclined rapidly” does not form a natural grammatical description of the total, and “sudden rose seen” lacks a correctly formed verb phrase. In “0.7 million of travellers were abide on island,” the verb construction is faulty, while “this number increased” shifts awkwardly from the earlier plural subject. Practise forming complete clauses with accurate past-tense verbs and consistent subjects, and use punctuation to separate the longer trend descriptions clearly.

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