Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The information realted to the number of tourists visting a specfic Carribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Overall, after a quick it can be noticable that the amount of total visitors was more in the staying in the island.
Firstly, the visitore who staying on cruise ships had fluculted in the year 2010 to 2017 omly 3.5 million people was visited in the cruise ships. Futhermore, in year 2013 visitors staying in island was remain constant and the visitors value was only 1 million which was remained constant in the ended year which was accounted for 2 million in the year 2017.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response identifies the topic and attempts an overview, but it does not adequately summarise the graph’s main features. The claim that total visitors were “more in the staying in the island” is unclear and reverses the key comparison: the total is a separate series, while island-staying visitors were higher than cruise-ship visitors until 2016. Several figures are also misreported: 3.5 million in 2017 is the total, not cruise-ship visitors, which reached about 2 million; island visitors were about 1.5 million in 2017, not 2 million. The account omits the overall rise in total visitors and gives little accurate comparison. It is also 48 words below the required minimum. Include a clear overview and select accurate figures to support it.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overview and then a detail paragraph. Sequencing words such as “Overall,” “Firstly,” and “Furthermore” signal this structure. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview is unclear and the detail paragraph combines several trends without distinguishing the three graph series. For example, the sentence beginning “Firstly, the visitore who staying on cruise ships” shifts from cruise-ship figures to island figures, making the comparisons hard to track. Use separate, logically ordered sentences for the total and the two visitor categories, and make each reference explicit. The current linking words provide some structure, but they cannot compensate for unclear relationships between the information.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The response uses a small range of task-related vocabulary, including “tourists,” “visitors,” “cruise ships,” “constant,” and “million,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, spelling errors such as “realted,” “visting,” “specfic,” “Carribbean,” and “fluculted” are frequent and reduce clarity. Several word choices or combinations are also inaccurate or unnatural, including “the amount of total visitors,” “the visitore who staying,” and “in the ended year.” These limitations make it difficult to express comparisons and trends precisely. Build a reliable set of graph-description terms, such as “the figure for,” “rose,” “remained stable,” and “reached,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts both simple and more extended sentence forms, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms and sentence construction appear in phrases such as “the visitore who staying on cruise ships had fluculted” and “visitors staying in island was remain constant.” The opening is also a sentence fragment: “The information realted to the number of tourists…” lacks a main verb. Agreement and article use are problematic in “the amount of total visitors was more,” while the long final sentence does not clearly connect its clauses. These errors often make the intended comparisons difficult to understand. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent past-tense forms to describe the years shown.
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