Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

As can be seen in the graph the numerals of visitors staying on cruise ships and staying and total visitors on Caribbean island in the year between 2010 to 2017.(in millions).

Overall, the highest number of tourists staying on cruise ships they were down and suddenly increase. Moreover, the total numerals of visitors and staying on islands also increase no one can down. However, the highest number of tourists in million was total according to others.

It compares the graph the three different types of visitors staying on ships, islands, and total in different years. Firstly, In the year of 2010 the symbol of visitors staying in ships and island were 3 millions and less than 1 millions. So importantly there were 1 millions of visitors stay total in 2010. Moreover, there was a cruise ship tourists live in around 0.5 millions and other stayng on island was 1.5 millions . The figure of total visitors were increase 2 millions accorcing to others. Further, there were a 3.5 millions total visit and the tourist lives on island were decrease accoringf to tatal was same 1.5 m,illiond and last one was 2 millions

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and attempts an overview, noting that the total and island-staying figures generally rise and that the total is highest. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: cruise-ship visitors do not fall and then suddenly increase overall; they fluctuate early before rising steadily, from about 0.25 million to 2 million. Several figures are misreported, most notably the 2010 cruise-ship figure, given as 3 million rather than about 0.25 million. The account also jumps between years and leaves key comparisons unexplained, so the main features are only minimally reported. To improve, select the overall trends and turning points, then support them with accurate, clearly identified figures for the relevant years.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and a detail paragraph, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover” and “Further” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the progression within the detail paragraph is difficult to follow: it moves from 2010 to figures that appear to describe later years without naming those years, and the final sentence combines several comparisons in a confusing way. Some links are also used where the relationship between ideas is unclear. For example, “Moreover” introduces figures without establishing which year they refer to. A clearer sequence—describe the overall trends first, then compare the start, middle and end of the period—would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “visitors,” “total,” “increase” and “decrease,” and it attempts to describe categories and trends. However, the vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “the numerals of visitors,” “the symbol of visitors” and “tourists live on island” are not natural ways to describe the data. Spelling errors, including “stayng” and “accorcing,” also reduce clarity. Use precise terms such as “number,” “figure,” “visitors staying on the island” and “rose,” and vary trend language appropriately. This would make the report more accurate and easier to read.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, and the use of “Overall” to introduce a summary shows some control of report structure. However, sentence construction is frequently inaccurate, and errors sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. For example, “the highest number of tourists staying on cruise ships they were down” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “the figure of total visitors were increase” has problems with agreement and verb form. Articles, plurals and prepositions are also inconsistent, as in “on Caribbean island” and “1 millions.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention, particularly in the long final sentence. Practise writing short, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb before combining ideas.

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