Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given line graph reprsents the tourist movement on Caribbean island in the time period 2010 to 2017 coming in cruise ships and staying on island.

Firstly, people staying on island at caribbean island were around 0.75 million in year 2010 and people staying on the cruise ships were half of the people staying on the island. One year later the people staying on island was same as the last year but there was little increase in people staying on cruise ships then the last year. Following the year 2012 visitors staying on cruise had increase almost upto 1.25 millon visitors but a deacrese was seen in the peolpe staying on the island. Afterwards there was a continuous uptrend for the next 5 years of visitors staying on curise and in year 2017 it had a good increase reaching upto 2 millon visitors. Following to people staying on island

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the period and both visitor categories, and it reports some relevant figures, including island visitors at about 0.75 million in 2010 and cruise-ship visitors reaching 2 million in 2017. However, it does not provide a clear overview of the main pattern, and several details are inaccurate: cruise-ship visitors were about 0.25 million in 2012, not 1.25 million, while island visitors rose to about 1.25 million that year rather than decreasing. The account also stops before describing the island trend in the later years or comparing the total, which climbed to 3.5 million. The response is one word below the required minimum. Add a concise overview and accurately cover the key trends and comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic chronological sequence, signalled by phrases such as “Firstly,” “One year later,” and “Following the year 2012.” This gives the reader some sense of time progression. However, the response is presented as one paragraph, and its progression becomes unclear: the final phrase, “Following to people staying on island,” is incomplete and leaves the discussion unfinished. Some linking is mechanical, and references such as “it” in the sentence about the 2017 increase are not always precise. Organise the report into a brief introduction, an overview, and logically grouped details. Use transitions to connect complete comparisons, rather than relying mainly on year-by-year sequencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a minimally adequate range for describing trends, including “increase,” “continuous uptrend,” and “reaching upto 2 million.” These expressions make the general topic understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “tourist movement,” “good increase,” and “people staying on cruise ships.” Spelling errors—including “reprsents,” “millon,” “deacrese,” and “curise”—are noticeable and can distract the reader. Aim for precise chart language such as “visitor numbers,” “rose,” “remained stable,” and “cruise-ship visitors.” Check spelling carefully and vary trend verbs so that each category and change is described clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentences, for example, “One year later the people staying on island was same as the last year but there was little increase…” This shows an effort to combine related information, but the range remains limited and complex constructions are often faulty. Errors include subject–verb agreement (“people … was”), missing articles (“on island”), and incorrect verb forms (“had increase”). The final fragment, “Following to people staying on island,” is incomplete and prevents the report from ending grammatically. Use shorter, controlled sentences when comparing figures, and check agreement, articles, and tense. A wider range of accurate sentence patterns would make the trends easier to follow.

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