Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph draws compares the trend of people visiting at Caribbean island from 2010 and 2017.

Overall, total number of tourist rose consistently in a time period of seven years from 2010 to 2017. However, the visitors staying on cruise ship highlights a slight dip in 2012 and than marked a continous increase till 2017. The visitors staying on island have fluctuating trend over the years with a decreased number in 2011 and 2016.

The total figure of tourists visiting Caribbean island increased continously and peaked in 2017 with 3.5 million tourists visiting it. Furthermore, the people staying on cruise ship also showed a significant increase from less than 0.5 million in 2010 to around 1.5 million people in 2017. It also showed a marginal dip of around 0.25 million of people in 2012 compared to 2011 0.5 million people.

In addition to that, visitors staying on island increased marginally by rise from less than 1 million in 2011 to around 1.5 million for around 3 years till 2015. It highlights aslight dip in 2016 rising to same level in 2017

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main overall rise in total visitors and distinguish the two accommodation groups, with relevant figures such as the total reaching 3.5 million in 2017 and cruise-ship visitors dipping in 2012 before rising. This gives the response a clear overview and covers the main series. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the cruise-ship figure in 2017 was about 2 million, not 1.5 million, and island visitors did not decrease in 2011; they remained at about 0.75 million. The island series also fluctuated only modestly, so describing it broadly as fluctuating overstates the pattern. More precise comparisons, especially noting that cruise-ship visitors drove much of the later growth, would make the key features more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs reporting details. The progression from the overall pattern to the separate visitor categories is generally easy to follow, and linking phrases such as “Overall” and “Furthermore” help signal relationships. This is a coherent arrangement, though cohesion is sometimes mechanical or unclear. For example, “It also showed a marginal dip” has an uncertain reference, and “In addition to that” adds little to the comparison. The final sentence ends abruptly, without punctuation or a clear concluding comparison. To strengthen progression, group the figures by trend and use precise references such as “the island-staying figure” rather than “it.”

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “peaked,” “significant increase,” “marginal dip,” and “fluctuating trend.” These choices help describe movement and scale, and the meaning is generally clear. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive: “draws compares” is not a natural description of a graph, “people visiting at Caribbean island” is awkward, and “increased marginally by rise” is unclear. There are also spelling and spacing slips, including “continous,” “continously,” and “aslight.” Aim for more precise, natural reporting language and check spelling; for example, use “illustrates,” “visitors to the island,” and “rose slightly.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including contrast with “However” and a relative clause in “the visitors staying on cruise ship highlights…”. Most of the intended meaning can be understood, but some grammatical errors recur. The opening sentence has a faulty construction (“draws compares”), and articles and number agreement are inconsistent, as in “total number of tourist rose” and “the visitors staying on cruise ship highlights.” The phrase “from 2010 and 2017” also uses the wrong preposition, while the final sentence lacks a full stop. Improve control of articles, plural forms, subject–verb agreement, and sentence completion, then proofread each sentence for a clear grammatical structure.

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