Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of tourists who visit in Caribbean Island in 2010 to 2017.
Overall, it can be seen that the number of visitors increased throughout the period. Visitors staying on cruise ship recorded the most visitors whereas visitors staying on island experience the less number of trourist.
On the other hand, visitors staying on cruship accounted for exactly 1 million in 2010, 1.4 million in 2011, 1.5 million in 2012, moderately increased at 2 million in 2013, 2.5 million in 2014, remained stable in 2015 and 2016 at 2.8 million, and 3.5 million in the last period. While, tourist staying on island recorded at 0.8 million in 2010 and 2011, 1.4 million in 2012, stay constant at exactly 1.5 million in 2013 to 2015, in 2015 experience declined slightly at 1.4 million, and 1.5 million in 2017.
The total number of tourist remained the same at 0.5 million in 2011 and 2012, and rose significantly at 1 million, 1.3 million, 1.5 million, and 2 million in 2013 to 2017.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response identifies an overall rise and attempts to describe all three series, but the account of the data is substantially inaccurate, which limits how fully it addresses the task. In particular, the cruise-ship figures are confused with the total: the response gives 1 million in 2010 and 3.5 million in 2017, whereas these are the total figures only at the end, and cruise visitors rose from about 0.25 to 2 million. The total series is also misreported as falling or remaining at 0.5 million in 2011–12, when it rose from about 1.25 to 1.5 million. The overview also incorrectly says cruise visitors were the largest group throughout. Check each line separately and select accurate key comparisons before drafting.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the visitor categories and total. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “Overall” and “On the other hand” signal transitions. However, progression is weakened by the inaccurate grouping of figures and by the final paragraph, which lists values without clearly explaining the total’s overall pattern. “While” begins a sentence fragment after the cruise-ship account, and “On the other hand” does not express a clear contrast between the data series. Use one paragraph for the overview and then group related trends logically, with accurate references such as “the total” and “cruise-ship visitors” so the reader can follow each line.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the general subject and some changes, including “increased,” “remained stable,” “declined slightly,” and “rose significantly.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, sometimes making the data harder to interpret. Examples include “the less number of trourist,” “cruship,” and “recorded at,” while “experience” is used where a trend verb is needed. Spelling errors such as “trourist” and “cruship” also reduce precision. Build a small set of accurate chart-description phrases and use them consistently—for example, “stood at,” “rose to,” and “the figure for visitors staying on the island.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts some longer structures, including a sentence that tracks figures across several years, and the basic meaning is often recoverable. However, the range is limited and complex sentences are frequently faulty. For example, “Visitors staying on cruise ship recorded…” lacks a clear grammatical subject construction, and “While, tourist staying on island recorded…” is an incomplete clause with incorrect punctuation. Tense and agreement also shift: “stay constant” and “experience declined” do not fit the past-time reporting consistently. Articles and plurals are often missing, as in “in Caribbean Island” and “tourist.” Use complete past-tense sentences, check singular/plural agreement and articles, and avoid joining a long sequence of figures with comma-separated fragments.
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