Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Millions of visitors visit a caribbean island and staying on different places like cruise ships and on island .
From 2010 to 2017 ,less then 0.5 millions visitors come on island and they where all staying on curise ships .
Furthermore, the visitors more then 0.5 millions come on island and staying on island from 2010 to 2017 .
In addition ,many changes occur in the value of visitors which stay on island in 2010 this value of visit constant till 2011 and then gradully increase with the passage of time .
Meanwhile,the total value of visitors more then 1 millions from 2010 to 2017 there is a huge addition in value of visitors at caribbean island .
overall, many ups and down occur in the value of visitors in this island from 2010 to 2017 .it is a great place to visit for visitors .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response identifies the chart’s subject and mentions a general rise in visitor numbers, but it reports the data inaccurately and omits the key comparison between the two visitor groups. For example, “less then 0.5 millions visitors” is not a correct summary of visitors staying on the island: this figure rose from about 0.75 million to 1.5 million. The claim that these visitors “where all staying on curise ships” also confuses the categories. There is no clear, accurate overview of the total increasing from 1 million to 3.5 million, or of cruise-ship visitors becoming the larger group by 2017. The response is also one word below the 150-word minimum. Select the main trends and support them with accurate comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and using linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “In addition,” and “Meanwhile.” However, these connectors do not create a clear progression: the response moves between visitor categories and totals without consistently distinguishing them, and several statements repeat the general idea that values changed or increased. The final comment that the island is “a great place to visit” is not relevant to describing the graph and weakens the ending. Group the information into a clear overview and focused details, for example, describing the overall total and then comparing the two accommodation categories. Use references such as “the total” and “cruise-ship visitors” consistently so readers can follow each point.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent imprecise or inappropriate choices that make some information difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “huge addition in value,” “many ups and down,” and “the value of visitors” do not describe graph trends naturally; “a substantial increase,” “fluctuations,” and “the number of visitors” would be more suitable. There are also spelling errors, including “caribbean,” “curise,” and “gradully,” and the repeated use of “value” limits precision. The response does attempt trend language with “increase,” “constant,” and “changes,” but these terms are not always used accurately. Build a small range of precise expressions for rises, stability, totals, and comparisons, and check spelling and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response relies mainly on simple statements and shows limited control of sentence structure. Errors are frequent, including incorrect verb forms and agreement in “visitors … come” and “they where all staying,” as well as faulty comparative constructions such as “visitors more then 0.5 millions come.” Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent: “in this island” and “overall” after a full stop are examples. Some meaning can still be inferred, but these recurring errors make relationships between figures unclear. Practise accurate past-tense descriptions and basic comparison patterns, such as “the number rose from … to …” and “more visitors stayed on cruise ships than on the island.” Use full stops and commas to separate complete ideas.
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