Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the line graph shows the number of tourists visiting a caribbean island between 2010 and 2017,including total the visitor staying on cruise ships and visitors staying on island

overall,number of tourists visiting island increase while the visitors staying on cruise ships steadily close the figure visitors staying on island greater in the group.

In the 2010,the visitors staying 0.5% in the number of 3.5 increase while the island visitors 1 figures consider in th emillions of visitors .the 2012 the cruise ships0.3% aer slightly belows this level rather than the 2014 the island visitors2.5% staying in the cruise ships.

After 2017, the millions of visitors visiting in the cruise ships1.5% are belows this level 0 rather than the island is increase in the millions of visitors.while the tourists visiting in the island greater in the number of1.5 .the total number of visiting island is increased rather than the cruise ships2.5% in caribbean island increase.number of turists a caribben island increase in the all millions of visitotrs but some slightly belows this levels.2017 tourists visiting increase in the 3.5%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the graph’s subject and attempt to describe the total and the two visitor groups, so the response is relevant to the task. However, the overview is unclear and includes an inaccurate comparison: visitors staying on the island were not greater throughout, as cruise-ship visitors rose to 2 million in 2017 while island stays were about 1.5 million. Several figures are also misreported or difficult to interpret, such as “0.5%” in 2010 and the claim that the 2014 island figure was “2.5%.” The main trends that could be reported clearly are the overall rise in total visitors, the steady growth in cruise-ship visitors after fluctuations early on, and the relatively stable island figure after 2013. Select and compare these accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and further detail, which gives it some basic structure. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the body repeatedly shifts between years and visitor categories without a clear sequence. For example, the paragraph beginning “After 2017” actually discusses the final year shown, and the repeated statements about increases do not build a clear comparison. Linking words such as “while,” “rather than” and “but” are used, but their relationships are often unclear or inaccurate. Group the information chronologically or by visitor type, and use each paragraph to develop one clear point. Clearer sentence boundaries and references to the relevant series would also help readers follow the comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “line graph,” “total,” “visitors,” “increase” and “millions of visitors,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or combinations make the intended meaning hard to understand. Phrases such as “steadily close the figure,” “the island visitors 1 figures consider” and “visitors staying on island greater in the group” are not natural ways to describe data. The repeated use of “increase” also limits precision when describing stable or fluctuating figures. Use standard trend language and accurate units: for example, “rose to,” “remained stable,” “fluctuated,” and “million visitors,” rather than percentages where the graph reports numbers of people.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses joined with “while” and “rather than.” However, grammatical control is weak: errors in sentence structure, verb forms, articles and punctuation frequently make the comparisons difficult to interpret. Examples include “overall,number of tourists visiting island increase” and “the total number of visiting island is increased,” where the subject and verb forms do not fit together. Several sentences also lack clear boundaries, such as the long final sequence beginning “the total number of visiting island…”. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check tense and agreement—for example, “The total number of visitors increased.” Use full stops to separate distinct trends.

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