Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph give some valuable insights about the people choices and their priorities.The graph compare people stayig on and island vs the vistors who preferred staying on cruise ships.The trend shows during early years from 2011 to 2015 there was and upward trend of approxiamtely 1.5 million people staying on the caribbean island while as comapred to the vistors on cruise ship who were at 1 million at that time.However vistor staying on the cruise ship showed an upward trend from 2013 to 2017,which increased from 0.5 million to 2 million with an almost 1.5x of increase.This masisve shift of choice tells about how people love to be in sea and enjoy the aqautic life as well the views.On the otherhand teh number of tourists visiting caribean island from 2010 to 2017 accounts for approximately 3.5millions,which depicts that how people love and prefer to be on island on either the cruise ship or in island teh main point is to enjoy and relax.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two visitor categories and include some relevant figures, such as cruise-ship visitors rising from 0.5 million in 2013 to 2 million in 2017, and the total reaching about 3.5 million in 2017. However, the response only partially summarises the graph. It gives no clear overview of the full pattern, and the claim that island-staying visitors were around 1.5 million from 2011 to 2015 is inaccurate: they were about 0.75 million in 2011 and reached 1.5 million in 2013. The total trend and the changing relationship between the two groups are not clearly described. The comments about people’s preferences and enjoying sea views are speculation rather than information shown by the graph. Focus on the main trends and comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some attempt to connect ideas using “However,” “while,” and “from…to…,” and the response broadly moves from the two visitor groups to the total. However, it is presented as one continuous paragraph, with no clear separation between an introduction, overview, and supporting details. The progression is difficult to follow because figures, interpretation, and speculation are mixed together. For example, the sentence beginning “This massive shift of choice” moves from a numerical trend to an unsupported explanation, while the final sentence combines the total figure with a repeated claim about visitor preferences. Organise the response into clear stages and use linking expressions to show comparisons accurately, rather than joining several ideas in long sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing data, including “upward trend,” “increased,” and “approximately,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spelling errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “people choices,” “massive shift of choice,” and “aquatic life.” Phrases such as “an almost 1.5x of increase” are not natural ways to report a change, and “accounts for approximately 3.5 millions” uses an unsuitable expression for a total. Aim for precise chart language such as “rose to,” “remained stable,” “visitor numbers,” and “the total reached.” Check spelling carefully, especially for key terms and repeated words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas in longer sentences, using clauses introduced by “while” and “which,” but these structures are often faulty, and many sentences contain errors that make the relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “The graph give” has subject–verb disagreement, while “The graph compare people…” also lacks the correct verb form. Articles and sentence construction are problematic in “on and island” and “the main point is to enjoy and relax.” Punctuation is also inconsistent: several sentences run together without spaces after full stops, and commas do not reliably separate clauses. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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